Midnight Moon

[Vicki]

Thanks, @idunno ! I have not heard of Lehua Kalima...so now I need to look her up!

[mayaclars]

@Vicki ,

"(1) the melody..."  I think you are being overly self-critical. Listening to your song, I didn't feel that the melody was "boring". An interesting melody flows airily throughout the song. There are no problems with either the melody or the ending of the song. Everything is very good.

"(2) production..." For my taste, the drums in the song are enough.  This is not a trendy song with over-compressed vocals and an abundance of strange, extraneous sounds. This is a soulful country song. Extra instruments will only distract. I like both the melody and the production.

The song is very soulful. I have listened to it several times already.

Maya

[Vicki]

Thank you very much @mayaclars !

[OleAnders]

Very nice Vicki! It works very well with a simple arrangement so not sure I would arrange this too complex unless you have a very clear idea what you want.

What you could do is to add a little more dynamic to the performance. Like the the third line of each verse you could have stands out a bit more either by more ore less power to your strumming and vocals and the same going into choruses. 

Enjoyed it!

[Vicki]

Thank you @OleAnders ! It's sounding like simple is the way to go. I appreciate your input. And everyone's...

[Dorian Urac]

Why the doubt? This is far from boring! The melody is wonderful and keeps me dragged in. I even listened to it twice without it getting boring. Love the raw folk vibe of the song, as well as the timbre of your voice.

The only thing I did notice on the production was that on small laptop speakers, the drums seemed buried under the guitar. Small laptop speakers are of course not ideal to judge a mix, but still it was apparent enough that they went almost "missing" after the short drum intro. Maybe this is less of a problem on headphones or on large speakers?

I'll be following you on Soundcloud. Curious to hear more from you. 

Greetings, Dorian

[Vicki]

Thank you, @Dorian Urac ! I'll be coming back to this one eventually. It's part of a musical I'm writing, My Grandfather's Clock. I just looked a few minutes ago and was startled to see I started it at least as far back as 2015. Just so you know, I have NOT been working on it all that time.

So, anyway, I'll revisit the mix. I don't have a good setup for testing different systems, so I'll figure that out.

I appreciate your complimentary words!

Vicki