The Rise & Fall Of The Gossip King

[Carlonely]

Hi,
I've just released a new song called "The Rise & Fall Of The Gossip King"!

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As it's not the most easiest piece of music to find a vocal melody to I've worked on that one for quite a while. I'm still not completely sure whether the music and the vocals really fit together but I like slightly weird songs so that's it

Lyrics:

Verse 1:
He appeared to be a silent guy – but not the one that you'd call shy
In fact he forgot a lot – and was embarrassed when he was caught
We thought he was the one keep – our secrets that were oh so deep
So little did we know – we could have seen it, though
Chorus:
One day they'll meet – and discover that I cheat
When I promise I will be discreet
How will I explain – that I try in vain
Not to do so each and every time
Verse 2:
Years elapsed and time went by – he'd kept the whole gang in the eye
The information flow – did never break off, no
Some secrets left the privacy – but no connection was to see
Everything does leak out – so no one raised a doubt
Verse 3:
A false sense of security – blew away his anxiety
All in one place we were – when someone caused a stir
By blurting out what she thought that – was largely known and widely spread
The opposite was the case – for him there was no grace

What's your opinion? Do you like it? What works and what doesn't?
I'm looking forward to your replies

[ChrisPrice]

Wow, this is unusual. I'm trying to think of something it reminds me of, but I'm drawing a blank. I really like this. It's very well arranged and I reckon the vocals work really well. Top marks from me. I love it.

[Nick Ryder]

Quirky, original but great.

There's nothing wrong with the songwriting or arrangement, but I feel the mix could be louder and a bit punchier

Good work @Carlonely

[mattyoungmusic]

Really cool and unusual song, well done!  The vocal melody really took some twists and turns that were impossible to predict.  I particularly like the faster delivery at the start of the 2nd and 4th lines in each verse. 

It's a completely different thing, but DEVO comes to mind - I can't even explain why!

[Carlonely]

Thanks for your kind words!

[Mora Amaro La Loba]

A very different song!!! I enjoyed the story and arrangement, very difficult to put all in place!!! But you reached it

[subvibe]

Hi

Quirky song with a interesting lyrics
a lot going on the background that seems to drown the drums
i think if you had side chained the drums with trackspacer or fuser
it would bring more clarity in the mix 

otherwise a great song

subvibe

[PeteS]

I love it and it's definitely the sort of thing that would be on my playlist!  I don't like comparisons to other bands because this is all you but I can hear influences for 80s, 90s and 00s.

Really looking forward to hearing what else you've got!

EDIT: I've just had a quick flick through your soundcloud and i see some familiar names!  They're all good and your solo stuff stands out as well.

[crexes]

I really liked this! Unusual in a good way and kept my interest for the whole song!
Room for improvement may be the mix as someone else pointed out.
Great work!

[Thekesslerboy]

Excellent original song. The melody fits well. Shades of Blur and Julian Cope. A big compliment.

[Vicki]

I think the vocals and melody fit together fine. It's fun and quirky. My favorite line is "A false sense of security – blew away his anxiety". Immediately I think...Uh-oh! What's going to happen now??

[icystorm]

@Carlonely -- A cool track with interesting chord changes, great vocals, and unique synth sounds. The vocals provide a sense of Simon Le Bon (80%) meets John Lennon (20%). Are you influenced by Duran Duran? Nice song! I enjoyed listening!