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Title: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 02, 2025, 02:56 PM
Hi Guys,

Unfortunately my brother died last month, I wrote this song for him, I would be interested in your feedback, it is the second song there "Johnny's song"

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IA3wmMGv6X8&list=OLAK5uy_kaMuA2N8wZs69BTfKUrsK_J6ZTGmY8Ywo

Thanks George
Title: Re: Johnny's son (The way it was before)
Post by: ChrisPrice on Feb 02, 2025, 10:43 PM
George, I'm so sorry hear about your brother. This is a beautiful tribute.
It's an excellent production. Really clear vocals, great backing choir, lovely instrumentation.
You've done your brother proud.

Best regards,
Chris
Title: Re: Johnny's son (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 03, 2025, 12:03 AM
Hi Chris,

Thank you, that means a lot,

George
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: Vicki on Feb 04, 2025, 03:26 AM
So sorry for your loss, George. This is a very touching song, a wonderful tribute.
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 04, 2025, 10:56 AM
Hi Vicki,

Thank you,

George
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Feb 04, 2025, 08:42 PM
I'm so sorry about your brother and as I listen to the song I think about the void he left in your heart that you have filled with light with this beautiful and emotional song.
Speaking of the song, I like the way it sounds, it's solid, has a very logical and easy to follow construction and a soft, angelic arrangement.
I wish I could read the lyrics, you know my English is limited.
Take care and keep making beautiful songs to hold on to if you fall. @jazz101
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 06, 2025, 12:57 AM
Hi Mora,

Thank you so much for your comments, I do appreciate them, and just for you here are the Lyrics,

George

Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Hey Brother, I wonder where you are.
Are you sitting on a cloud somewhere, looking down from afar?
Are you watching over all of us, with that big smile on your face ?
Hoping that we all will learn, from all of our mistakes.

Chorus
Each day I wake up and I mourn
Loosing you my brother, has left me,
Like a thorn without a rose
Like a knight without a King
On a never-ending walkway, that never leads to anything
And what I wouldn't give and more
To have you back my brother,
and everything, the way it was before

Hey Johnny, with that big smile on your face
Nothing was too serious and you were always late
Remember, we would fight till dawn
And mum and dad would say "boys will be boys"
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: mattyoungmusic on Feb 06, 2025, 10:35 AM
A great and heartfelt tribute.  The lyrics really say it all.  Well done.
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: Rightly on Feb 06, 2025, 01:47 PM
very heart-warming song.
My condolences  :(
I hope you're surrounded by supportive family and friends.

The song has a very clear production
And a good vocal performance

Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 06, 2025, 05:15 PM
Thank you Matty and Rightly for your comments, appreciated,

George
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: songsmith on Feb 13, 2025, 01:35 PM
Hi George,
Really a lovely song and a very professional and competent performance/recording.
I feel sure your brother would be proud of you.
Colin.
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Feb 13, 2025, 07:36 PM
Just to check you are ok Gorge!!
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 14, 2025, 11:06 AM
Hi Mora,

Muy bien gracias, desafortunadamente todo es parte de la vida. I hope I got that right, thank you for your concern, my writing keeps me busy,

George
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 14, 2025, 03:19 PM
Hi,

Thank you to everyone for their comments they are greatly appreciated,

George
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: IronKnee on Feb 14, 2025, 06:04 PM
That's a tough thing... to lose your brother. It's hard for me to imagine that great sense of loss. My heart goes out to you.
It's a lovely song.
God bless you.
                        -T
Title: Re: Johnny's song (The way it was before)
Post by: jazz101 on Feb 20, 2025, 10:15 PM
Thanks IronKnee.