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General Category => Lyrics => Topic started by: idunno on Feb 15, 2025, 01:43 AM

Title: Minstrel's Song
Post by: idunno on Feb 15, 2025, 01:43 AM
Dreams are alive and then some have gone
And you, I will always have you
A child in your laughter and things you do
And a love of a spirit so true

As true as I am just an effigy
Of the man I wish you could know
The one who could give to you all your dreams
One at a time as we grow

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Worlds and wisdoms have gone before
But only one truth will remain
Love lies beyond scribes and troubadours
Love lies beyond its joy and its pain

And I know you and I will always be
The story that love wants to tell
In the songs of the minstrels and troubadours
Who delight in love's magic spell

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Chorus -

But wizards dwell only in minstrel songs
And your minstrel is taken by strife
All I can do is to be with you
All I can do is give you my life

And love you the way that  I do
And hold you and try to abide
When love's silk and steel
Must choose a side
And  I will always be the effigy
Of the man I wish you could know
Title: Re: Minstrel's Song
Post by: Vicki on Feb 19, 2025, 09:09 PM
Sounds like a man who thinks he's not understood...maybe?

I like the lines:
But wizards dwell only in minstrel songs
and
When love's silk and steel must choose a side

I'm wondering if this line:
All I can do is to be with you

would flow better if it was:
All I can do is be with you (taking out "to")

Do you have a melody for this?
Title: Re: Minstrel's Song
Post by: idunno on Feb 23, 2025, 01:38 AM
Hello Vicki. Nice to make your acquaintance.

Yes, eliminating "to" works better.

I have a melody but my melody making has always been uninspiring. If I was to make a demo of this where would I post it on this site?

Edit: Vicki, the song is about a man who feels deep down that he isn't good enough for the one who loves him and he's constantly conflicted by it.