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Title: These are the things that men do
Post by: Dan on Mar 30, 2025, 09:26 AM

https://youtu.be/Xx07XqSsd78?si=W-UGegiFeyVH7Ub1

This is pretty much finished, I'm thinking about adding some additional strings and not entirely sure about the lyrics- perhaps I'm overthinking and I don't need to faff around anymore with it. What do you guys think?

Title: Re: These are the things that men do
Post by: icystorm on Mar 30, 2025, 06:10 PM

@Dan - I think you've got the makings of a good track here. You might consider adding a bit more variation to the drums and other instruments to give the song some dynamic movement. Right now, the hypnotic, repetitive melody and steady rhythm give it a trance-like quality, which leans a little toward monotony.

I could imagine this track in a psychological thriller, maybe in a scene where someone's getting strapped into a straitjacket after an ugly domestic spat. 😂

I'm looking forward to hearing how the track evolves!

Cheers,
Joseph

Title: Re: These are the things that men do
Post by: Dan on Mar 30, 2025, 06:55 PM

Thanks for the feedback. Given me some ideas

Title: Re: These are the things that men do
Post by: Dan on Apr 02, 2025, 03:54 PM

https://youtu.be/QMpu459ok3g?si=DyYxXp_VeDgNPAUM

Okay so I've overhauled the drum track so the snare on the 4s doesnt come in until half way through and added some cymbals. Also made the synth riff more dynamic so its not so monotonous.

Title: Re: These are the things that men do
Post by: icystorm on Apr 02, 2025, 06:22 PM

@Dan - I like how this is trending. The improvements sound good! I think a song like this would fit well in a psychological thriller movie. Nice work! :D

Cheers,
Joseph

Title: Re: These are the things that men do
Post by: Dan on Apr 02, 2025, 06:36 PM

Thanks. Your pointers were very helpful.

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