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Title: we've been everywhere
Post by: Rightly on Apr 17, 2025, 07:35 PM
I struggled with this one
Really glad how the solo came together
Any feedback would be appreciated

I hope somebody likes it!  :D

link:

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/weve-been-everywhere?utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing&si=b60e4f90c3fb41c3846ac170045c1deb


Lyrics:

  we've been everywhere


   get up here, get up on your feet
the tide will turn for those who resist defeat
    we've been there, we know it too well
  the weight of the world must carry itself
     we don't care, Laissez-faire
         we've been there

   horizon, the promise of a distant shore
 no longer troubles me, it holds no allure
   body enraptured, still, my heart escapes
     with no fucks to give, I need not relate
       we don't care, Laissez-faire
           we've been there

   there's no going back to the shiny and new 
    so easy on the naked eye, and useful too
            we've been everywhere

 dragging y' dog through the most unrelenting pain
    it's sure to end in tears and in shame
       we don't care, Laissez-faire
            we've been there

 now what we have lost here had tactile value
    all novelty aside for the tested and true
            we've been everywhere
                   we've been everywhere


          _________

         Rightly
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: Elvis Nash on Apr 17, 2025, 09:17 PM
Thats cool man , nice production
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: ChrisPrice on Apr 21, 2025, 11:27 PM
You amaze me with your arrangements. I'm not too hot at interpreting lyrics, but yours always fascinate me. Your material is original in a very positive way and I love it. :)
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: Rightly on Apr 28, 2025, 11:13 AM
Quote from: ChrisPrice on Apr 21, 2025, 11:27 PMYou amaze me with your arrangements. I'm not too hot at interpreting lyrics, but yours always fascinate me. Your material is original in a very positive way, and I love it. :)

Thanks, Chris. This one was more arduous. It demanded quute some editing. I stumbled through a 10-hour session just to get the instrumental break right. I didn't know it would, with it being new ground. I think it paid off, though. I think I'm advancing incrementally.
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: neil connor on May 02, 2025, 05:04 PM
Rightly,
Liking the the backing track, it sets things up nicely with its bouncey rhythms.
Cool lyrics and vocals top it off well.
Nice one
Neil
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: Rightly on May 02, 2025, 05:46 PM
Quote from: neil connor on May 02, 2025, 05:04 PMRightly,
Liking the the backing track, it sets things up nicely with its bouncey rhythms.
Cool lyrics and vocals top it off well.
Nice one
Neil
Glad you like the song Neil.
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: IronKnee on May 04, 2025, 03:31 AM
Quote from: Rightly on Apr 17, 2025, 07:35 PMI struggled with this one
Really glad how the solo came together
Any feedback would be appreciated

I hope somebody likes it!  :D

link:

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/weve-been-everywhere?utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing&si=b60e4f90c3fb41c3846ac170045c1deb


Lyrics:

  we've been everywhere


   get up here, get up on your feet
the tide will turn for those who resist defeat
    we've been there, we know it too well
  the weight of the world must carry itself
     we don't care, Laissez-faire
         we've been there

   horizon, the promise of a distant shore
 no longer troubles me, it holds no allure
   body enraptured, still, my heart escapes
     with no fucks to give, I need not relate
       we don't care, Laissez-faire
           we've been there

   there's no going back to the shiny and new 
    so easy on the naked eye, and useful too
            we've been everywhere

 dragging y' dog through the most unrelenting pain
    it's sure to end in tears and in shame
       we don't care, Laissez-faire
            we've been there

 now what we have lost here had tactile value
    all novelty aside for the tested and true
            we've been everywhere
                   we've been everywhere


          _________

         Rightly

Hey there Rightly.....Superb. I don't agree but many do.
Title: Re: we've been everywhere
Post by: Vicki on May 04, 2025, 06:07 PM
Hints of military marching in the background with the repeated sentiment of "we don't care"...gets the point across. Works for me.