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Title: there to disappear
Post by: Rightly on Sep 10, 2025, 11:01 AM
Many moons ago I wrote the original of this
I produced it as a song, until recently at least twice
It has never worked on stage... but it's not over

When writing I was in a relationship that was was mostly amazing, but I knew it had to end.


Feedback would be appreciated

Link:

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/there-to-disappear?utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing&si=d33e64d5cb86420e9d857790fa7bcd75


lyrics:

there to disappear


with muted senses
searching so as not to find
shuffling our feet as
all our precious clocks
unwinding and wily
what be your business here?
if not to remind me of
all I truly am

and then, and there to disappear
oh, to disappear
and then, and there to disappear

guarded ignorance
wonder doesn't have a name
curtsy to indifference as
night follows days again
no time for distance
let me ring a bell in your ear
all out of patience
I turn another page

and then, and there to disappear
oh, to disappear
and then, and there to disappear

all these demands, this rush for affection
'just saying, who needs love when we've got protection?

and then, and there to disappear
oh, to disappear
and then, and there to disappear
to disappear

__________________

Rightly
Title: Re: there to disappear
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Sep 10, 2025, 12:12 PM
Glad to yes ups!!! and with a wonderful song!!! This relationship gavel you a new look and way to expression that I love.
Good to hear you following a melody that is a journey hand by hand with this incredible backing. @Rightly
Title: Re: there to disappear
Post by: Dorian Urac on Sep 24, 2025, 08:25 AM
The repetitive piano notes remind me of those antique Casio keyboard autochord rhythms, which I really dig. Just to underline my enthusiasm for such vibes: I actually own a few of such old keyboards, even used them on a few songs. :) 

Always a pleasure to listen to your creations.
Well done, as always!

Cheers, Dorian
Title: Re: there to disappear
Post by: Rightly on Oct 01, 2025, 08:05 AM
Quote from: Dorian Urac on Sep 24, 2025, 08:25 AMThe repetitive piano notes remind me of those antique Casio keyboard autochord rhythms, which I really dig. Just to underline my enthusiasm for such vibes: I actually own a few of such old keyboards, even used them on a few songs. :) 

Always a pleasure to listen to your creations.
Well done, as always!

Cheers, Dorian
You're an audiophile, talented to a scary degree.
Thanks for commenting  ;D