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General Category => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: subvibe on Oct 16, 2025, 01:30 PM

Title: Rivers Between Us
Post by: subvibe on Oct 16, 2025, 01:30 PM
Hi

Here is a new song i have done
Its melodic EDM

Stream Rivers Between Us by subvibe | Listen online for free on SoundCloud (https://soundcloud.com/subvibe-958077223/rivers-between-us)

Thanks for taking the time to Listen

subvibe
Title: Re: Rivers Between Us
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Oct 17, 2025, 05:33 PM
I was surprised by the opening of the song, very different from your other ones. The vocal effect gives it a very modern feel, although, to my ears, the lyrics are hard to understand? Well, is that due to my poor English? Apart from this, it sounds great, like all your work.
@subvibe
Title: Re: Rivers Between Us
Post by: subvibe on Oct 17, 2025, 07:54 PM
Hi

i am not really happy with this song
i started it so i thought i would finish

We used to dance
In the pouring rain
Now we just stare
At each other through a windowpane
 
I reach out
But youre a current I cant hold
Youre so warm
But now youre eyes are cold
 
The rivers between us
Keep pulling me down
Drowning in the silence 
Cant hear a sound
But youre on the shore
Im lost in the flood
Still calling your name
Through the water and mud
The rivers between us
 
You float through dreams
But youre out of reach
Like a tide that just wont return
To the beach

regards

subvibe
Title: Re: Rivers Between Us
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Oct 18, 2025, 12:08 AM
Thank you for posting the lyrics!!!
I understand you perfectly because I also do the same.When I start a song I finish it, even if it's not totally to my tast.but it is not another step on the ladder of my learning. @subvibe
Title: Re: Rivers Between Us
Post by: Vicki on Oct 18, 2025, 04:30 AM
I envy how you can produce different genres; a skill I can't seem to achieve. I'm glad you posted the lyrics; thanks for that. I enjoyed this very much. Vivid images.
Title: Re: Rivers Between Us
Post by: idunno on Oct 23, 2025, 07:33 PM
It's a good song that needs to be arranged to your ultimate liking. When you're wrestling to get that down right sometimes stepping away (for me, anyway) gives me options to try. Nice work.