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General Category => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: WelshSteve on Nov 09, 2025, 04:18 PM

Title: Shadow Chaser
Post by: WelshSteve on Nov 09, 2025, 04:18 PM
https://soundcloud.com/steve-lewis-36/shadow-dancer

The last 6 months has proved to be difficult within my family circle. Illness has come hard and fast for my wife, mother, father and daughter.
Whenever I mention 'shadows' in my lyrics, I think I'm talking about illness...those severe cases that we all hate.
Anyway...this tune was written about being unwell and hunting down the culprit.

Shadow Chaser

Shadow dancer playing your game
Snake skin creeper taking your aim
Sliding through the long grass seeking us all
Devil disciple waiting for night to fall

There's a malady deep in your soul
Are you the Hooded Claw out of control?
Can you feel when you touch?
Do you bleed?
Dance in the darkness to a demon's beat?

Teardrops bleed red
Shadow Chaser's in my head
Right through the night and all through the day
Shadow Dancer stop playing your games

Snake-skinned creeper seek your pleasure
Your poison pill won't last forever
Do you feel when you t
ouch? Do you see?
Shadow dancing ends when dreamers believe

Teardrops bleed red
Shadow Chaser's in my head
Right through the night and all through the day
Shadow Dancer stop playing your games
Title: Re: Shadow Chaser
Post by: Vicki on Nov 09, 2025, 08:17 PM
Nice guitar. Nice harmonies. It got a little long for me; maybe I have a short attention span. I could see the length working for someone who is maybe meditating to it. I think that would work.

Side note: I'd really like to see you checking out songs the rest of us are posting and giving your feedback on them.

Keep writing!
Vicki
Title: Re: Shadow Chaser
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Nov 10, 2025, 05:04 PM
Interesting song and listening, I hope all is well now!!
Good lyrics portraying your reality!!
Title: Re: Shadow Chaser
Post by: Seriousfun on Nov 22, 2025, 11:03 PM
Really nice lyrics.  And I like the way you built the song at the start. But as others have mentioned a bit too long. Id cut the last minute of it as a song has to be pretty special and have some real variety in it to keep a listeners attention that long.

The song is cool, I really enjoyed but maybe thing of dropping the last minute, you have already delivered the message by then,