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Title: The Charms
Post by: Elvis Nash on Mar 17, 2026, 12:51 AM
https://www.mixcloud.com/ElvisNash/the-chrms/

First one wore a silver cross

Said it kept the devil off my back

Kissed me slow before a show

Said, "Baby, you ain't that bad"

She'd flick that lighter in the dark

Like she could spark my fate

I swore her touch was rabbit's foot luck

Every time I hit that stage

(Lift musically)

Thought she was my lucky charm

Till luck ran dry and she did too

Verse 2

Second one had emerald eyes

Said green meant money and grace

Laid her head against my heart

Like she owned that place

Kept a horseshoe over the door

Said, "Bad winds won't blow through here"

But storms don't knock, they kick things in

Then disappear

(Lift musically)

Yeah I called her my four-leaf clover

She folded when the cards turned cold

Verse 3

Third one laughed at superstition

Said fate's just whiskey talk

Burned sage in my old kitchen

Barefoot on the porch at dark

She said, "You don't need no talisman

You just need someone who'll stay"

But staying's harder than believing

In magic anyway

(Bigger lift)

I thought she might be different

But even good ones walk away

Bridge (strip it down)

Turns out luck ain't love at all

It's just hope dressed up in perfume

Final Verse (Play this like a CHORUS musically — biggest lift)

Then you showed up quiet

No silver, no smoke, no signs

No emerald promises

No lucky-number lines

You didn't hang above the doorway

Didn't dangle from a chain

You just stood there when the thunder came

And didn't change

(Hit this hard)

You ain't a charm I carry

You're the one who stayed

Yeah all that superstition faded

When you didn't walk away

Tag — repeat for hook feel:

You're the only lucky charm

That ever stayed