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Title: The other side of my silence
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Apr 18, 2026, 06:24 PM
I look out the window and everything seems fine, in its place: the sky, the peeking moon, the birds in the park, the light traffic, people already dressed in their summer clothes, but... Nothing is what it seems, is it?

I struggled a lot with this song, my mind was distracted, scattered, my ears heard words shouting news, like the ice cream vendor in the park, and the song fell asleep in a strange lethargy, and finally, I became myself again and finished it....!!!



I am afraid of tomorrow
because what ever it brings
I'll have to resist

and today
I am so tired
 
People
going through and fro
on the other side of my silence,
calms me down
and give me hope
 
while the storm,
wrapped in clouds,
sings impossible songs
tapping with its drops
over the roofs of the world
 
I finally open my window
to feel the rain on my face
like earth drinking that water
falling wild from the dark blue
 
It's cold
I am alive
tomorrow it can arrive
a miracle in my life
Title: Re: The other side of my silence
Post by: melroy pheasant on Apr 22, 2026, 02:02 PM
The string (s) effects start with giving this a more conventional rhythm than usual, and it gradually becomes more guitar dominated with wonderful interplay becoming more of a desolate landscape. Great poetic lyrics, especially;

I finally open my window
to feel the rain on my face
like earth drinking that water
falling wild from the dark blue

An inspiring work.
 
Title: Re: The other side of my silence
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Apr 23, 2026, 08:22 PM
Gracias!!! I like a lot lyrics here although I personally love the other paragraph describing the storm, I think it's very poetic.

Thanks again! Are you the voice that keeps the forum going? It's a difficult task, but I support you 8)
Title: Re: The other side of my silence
Post by: melroy pheasant on Apr 28, 2026, 02:07 PM
Am I the voice that keeps the forum going?

I try.
Title: Re: The other side of my silence
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on May 02, 2026, 07:02 PM
Yes, you are the one, a gentle giant!!!
@melroy pheasant