Hi.
Finally I break in 😆
So, I've this newish song. It was a fast write.
As is often with my own songs, I find them difficult to evaluate objectively.
Feedback would be thrilling.
Link:
Listen to You Gave Them Life by 2 Rightly on #SoundCloud
https://on.soundcloud.com/e2zZW
Lyrics:
You Gave Them Life
you gave them life, they take your life
and it's a crying shame
from passing need to elbows deep you
have no one else to blame
from day to day you have to pay
more than you can afford
as hammers fall, they'll take it all
then bleed you out for more
your sacrifice, you gave them life
far beyond reach, free when asleep
if only for a while
the screaming dancer wants an answer
he's just his mother's child
she's gath'ring now, a heavy cloud
almost ready to pour
feigned resistance t' mountains o' distance
out for the count, I'm sure
you pay the price, you gave them life
you gave them life, they take your life
you've been busy, spinning dizzy
your pleasures left a stain
the circle closes, thorns and roses
there's no joy without pain
childhood dreams now loose at the seams
you'll squeeze into that coat
gloves with patches, your house built of matches
sure to go up in smoke
you sacrifice, you gave them life
you gave them life, they take your life
you gave them life, they take your life
________
Rightly
I found my way back too. It's great hear a few favourite contributors again, and this certainly doesn't disappoint. What you create is unique and I appreciate it. I don't always understand the words, though I really like the lyrics to this one. This is a really clever song..I'm playing it through a third time to take it all in. :)
Hola
@Rightly So your!!! I love it all, melodies, going slow, falling down, tired, and a wonderful arrangement and instrumentation, as if they were waiting for your touch.
Quote from: ChrisPrice on Dec 10, 2024, 11:30 PMI found my way back too. It's great hear a few favourite contributors again, and this certainly doesn't disappoint. What you create is unique and I appreciate it. I don't always understand the words, though I really like the lyrics to this one. This is a really clever song..I'm playing it through a third time to take it all in. :)
Thanks Chris.
I've a handful of new songs.
Not as many as I'd like.
Life gets in the way and slows me down.
I'm often devising ways to reclaim my time. I'll win eventually.
God bless 🙌