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Title: When I Go Away
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on Aug 12, 2026, 04:38 PM
From time to time, I am prone to daydreaming. Nothing unusual about that, except in my case it sometimes causes me to lose focus on where I am or what I'm doing. What is more worrying is that my daydreams are not the happy, carefree things that most people like to think about. Sometimes I imagine myself being bullied and manipulated. It can be quite disturbing. I don't know why it happens. Perhaps it's just the way stress manifests for me.

Luckily, I have a wife who is very understanding and always helps to bring me back from despair. I decided to write a song about it.

For the music, I used a guitar looper pedal to play the riff over a range of chords, some happy, some sad. I hoped this would reflect my changing moods.

I hope you get some inspiration and enjoyment from it.

Any feedback most gratefully received. Thank you for listening.

https://youtu.be/1BrJC38EAMs?si=xpKJgi99U24KUqgA

It always hurts when I go away,
My mind was here but not today.

Hey where did you go just then? You ran from me.
I try to deny it but you see.

How can I stand to be so...
Ready to take it on although...
I never can face the foe in me,
But you are always here for me.

The memory shines but my mind is dull,
Those negative thoughts that I try to cull.

They're bringing me down. They're throwing me overboard.
You give me a nod and I feel adored.

I couldn't begin to wonder...
How I could hold it together...
If you were not here to tether me to the earth.
And then you give it all to me.

I try to roll with the punches just like you,
Sometimes I never know just what to do,
You catch me in the moment, break my fall down.
I try to see it different for my sake.

It's a beautiful day but I'm in the clouds.
Smiling so dumb, but the anger shrouds.

A pall of venom and a tide of hate.
The glow of your love is all too great.

I feel that I just can't take it.
The way that you never fake it.
You only ever give to me so true.
And then you go and look at me.
Title: Re: When I Go Away
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Aug 12, 2026, 06:15 PM
Good live performance, and cool song!!!

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