Hi all.
Great to have this place back!!
I thought I kick of with this song. I feel it's almost finished but not sure about a few elements, including the mix.
Looking forward to any feedback :)
https://soundcloud.com/user-81338256-916420941/cranberry-smile?si=eaaa0fa3d021475793710299b6f0bfff&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing (https://soundcloud.com/user-81338256-916420941/cranberry-smile?si=eaaa0fa3d021475793710299b6f0bfff&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing)
I haven't listened to the song yet (but I will ;) ) - but what a fantastic title to launch the new forum!!!!
Well played!!
Everything I've come to expect from you Nick. A great song, fabulous arrangement, vocals are top drawer and loving that bass sound. Kinda Beatles Revolver-ish. An awesome way to kick off the revamped forum. ;D
An excellent track. The vocals, instrumentation, arrangement, lyrics, production, and mix are all great! The song has a solid 60s vibe, but there are plenty of modern sounds too. The clever chord changes throughout keep the track very interesting. I enjoyed listening. Nice work! ;D
Cheers,
Joseph
Another corker
@Nick Ryder What an amazing start to the track! - it certainly made me sit up and listen!
The early lo-fi section is great and the first verse has exactly the 60s vibes referenced by both
@icystorm and
@ChrisPrice - but the bit I love most about your writing is the "modern" touches - and the harmonies on "
not what he said" at 34secs instantly drag the song into a more contemporary feeling track - and I was getting fantastic OASIS vibes from this point onwards
From a "writing" point of view, I think you have all of the right ingredients - but I was missing the "clear and obvious" hook/chorus" - There were a few points where it felt like it was building to a pay off, and then seemed to build to another pay off, etc. so it felt like it never actually arrived - mainly because the whole song was all so good and high energy!!!!
I would therefore personally suggest deciding what is the single hook/chorus - and then simplify the rest of the song and build it around this (e.g. make sure all roads lead there and then use the mix and production to support this)
I LOVED the bridge section - but would suggest halving the length (using the second half) and then launch straight back into your chorus section
Absolutely stellar writing, performance and production! BRAVO!
Thanks everyone for commenting and all points noted
@Boydie Much appreciated guys.
For some reason the link keeps taking me to your song "Cranberry Smile" which I remember listening to before the forum went offline and which I really like a lot. From there I'm able to navigate to "Goodbye" - excellent song! I like the organ sneaking around in that first quiet minute of the song.
Really strong chorus, great chord progression and melody to support it.
I'm looking forward to hearing more.
I enjoyed this a lot. The link does go to Cranberry Smile, but I found Goodbye here:
https://soundcloud.com/user-81338256-916420941/goodbye-v5
I especially liked the melody--so many songs these days seem to have what I think of as vague melodies. Yours is not vague!
Vicki