my way back to belonging
I've got two speeds, I'll come and go
with no singular needs
all I have... is wanting
♤
I've said goodbye, so many times
'hard to find my way back
to belonging
dust to ash, I try to find my way back
to belonging
♡
moving, yet still, buried alive
rewards were multiple
zero to one... and counting
rise above these... errant waves
come what may, we... seize the day
♧
boundaries hold, shining like new
star-bright and just as cold
resolute... unchanging
♤
empires arise, you will recall
and to no one's surprise
it was all... for nothing
dust to ash, I try to find my way back
to belonging
♡
rise above these... errant waves
come what may, we... seize the day
dust to ash, I try to find my way back
build a gun around this bullet...
to belonging
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r i g h t l y
A simple song.
I've just edited, a second time. Again, I sort of finished it.
Now the next step, learning to play it and produce it.
♤ means a short musical break
♧ a different short musical break
♡ a longer musical break
Any feedback is welcome 🙏
Interesting lyrics--on the surface the song seems kind of depressing. Going deeper, it seems to be about persevering.
Specific thoughts:
"I've got two speeds" - I suggest trying "I have two speeds" Two reasons. "I've got" stands for "I have got" and the 've in "I've" tends to get lost in the singing.
"I've said goodbye" - I suggest trying "I said goodbye". Same as the second reason above
I love the phrase "errant waves" and the image/feel of the whole line: "rise above these errant waves".
I look forward to hearing it.
Vicki
my way back to belonging
____________
I've got two speeds
I'll come and go
with no singular needs
all I have... is wanting
I've said goodbye
so many times
'getting hard to find my
way back to... to belonging l
dust to ash, I try to find my way back
to belonging
moving, yet still
buried alive
rewards were multiple
zero to one... and counting
rise above these... errant waves
come what may, we... seize the day
empires arise
you will recall
and to no one's surprise
it was all... for nothing
dust to ash, I try to find my way back
to belonging
rise above these... errant waves
come what may, we... seize the day
dust to ash, I try to find my way back
to belonging
Quote from: Vicki on Jan 12, 2025, 08:46 PMInteresting lyrics--on the surface the song seems kind of depressing. Going deeper, it seems to be about persevering.
Specific thoughts:
"I've got two speeds" - I suggest trying "I have two speeds" Two reasons. "I've got" stands for "I have got" and the 've in "I've" tends to get lost in the singing.
"I've said goodbye" - I suggest trying "I said goodbye". Same as the second reason above
I love the phrase "errant waves" and the image/feel of the whole line: "rise above these errant waves".
I look forward to hearing it.
Vicki
Hello Vicki
I appreciate the feedback.
Yes, not born of depression, but contemplative, more about persevering.
The "I've got..."
Is informal, conversational narrative.
Isn't all that necessary.
I might eventually change it.
The "I've said goodbye" is grammatically, present perfect, it has its use. I'll not change that.
I took your advice with
"Errant waves..."
I think repeating it might help fight off the depressing aspect, and give the song more accuracy.
😆 composing the song
I find
Is both the best and worst part of song world.
All the best. 👍