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Title: I am cold
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Jan 25, 2025, 10:50 AM
Winter is here, watering everything it touches while the wind accompanies it tearing off the last leaves that refuse to fall in an absurd rebellion



I am cold
but I stay still
without even trying
to put on my jacket

I light a cigarette
and inhale the smoke slowly
without knowing for sure
why do I repeat this rite
that burns me
between its threads

I think of you
I think of me
covered by the cold that stirs me

I think of you
I think of me

The streets empty with the breath of winter
while the leaves wander
putting upside down the order that existed

Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: subvibe on Jan 25, 2025, 11:44 AM
Hi

Super Song & the build up suspense is fantastic
great beat to drive the song forwards

Top Class

subvibe
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Jan 29, 2025, 05:10 PM
Quote from: subvibe on Jan 25, 2025, 11:44 AMHi

Super Song & the build up suspense is fantastic
great beat to drive the song forwards

Top Class

subvibe

Hola @subvibe
thank you, I love this song a lot, don't know why but I love it!!
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: icystorm on Jan 29, 2025, 06:03 PM
@Mora Amaro La Loba -- I love your work because your songs are always fresh and unique. "I Am Cold" pushes beyond pop music sensibilities and creates a unique genre of its own that defies classification. The blend of bass, percussion, and synths create an enjoyable vibe in the track. When the lead guitar is introduced around time index 1:19, it adds another complex and creative dimension to the song. The lyrics are interesting, simple, and effective at weaving the story of your winter song. Your vocals are excellent as usual. :D

I also like your introduction to your song where you wrote:

Winter is here, watering everything it touches while the wind accompanies it tearing off the last leaves that refuse to fall in an absurd rebellion

Clever and cool!

Regarding the video, it's up to your usual high standards. I enjoyed listening to your song and viewing your video! Keep your great, original songs and music videos coming in 2025! 8)

Cheers,
Joseph
 

Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: Vicki on Jan 29, 2025, 08:48 PM
This feels so familiar...did you ever post it before? As always it has a meditative quality to it. The production is super and, of course, the video.

Vicki
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: ChrisPrice on Jan 30, 2025, 07:03 PM
I've said this several times, but it's hard to offer constructive criticism when you do what you do so well. Another terrific track Mora. I look forward to the next one. :)
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on May 18, 2025, 10:49 PM
@icystorm @Vicki @ChrisPrice
Sorry for my delay on answering, life goes her way so far sometimes from mine... Thank you so much!!
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: icystorm on May 21, 2025, 06:04 AM
@Mora Amaro La Loba -- You're most welcome! I appreciated the opportunity to enjoy your awesome track and video again. Cool stuff with a great guitar riff! I'm probably in the minority, but I look forward to winter again! I love the cold and I have a countdown calendar in progress counting the days till the cooler days of autumn and winter! LOL!!! 🥶😂🤣

Kind regards,
Joseph 
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: subvibe on May 21, 2025, 08:08 PM
Hi
Wonderful Song & a treat to the ears
mix quality is 1st class as always
your unique style is intoxicating 

subvibe
Title: Re: I am cold
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on May 26, 2025, 05:42 PM
Hi Joseph @icystorm and @subvibe
Thank you! much appreciated, really. Stay well