New track from the New Bones. All feedback welome!

Quote from: Mora Amaro La Loba on May 12, 2025, 06:12 PMYes, you are right @IronKnee things have changed but... creators are the same, little hearts that beat in a special way making songs and sharing them like little children show they drawings to their friends or parents...
Of course it's a simile ... Actually creators, most of them, show their work made with pieces of work of others.

Remember, you are an excellent true singer songwriter, never forget it.

Thanks M.... that means a lot coming from you 

Hi all, I'm back   

Finally finished this song, about someone close to me who passed away this winter. I was just recording the guitar for this song which I already named "The end", when I got a phone call in which I heard about her fatal illness. It was a dark & strange coincidence. After her passing, additional lyrics were added and I dedicated the song to her.

https://soundcloud.com/dorian-urac/this-is-the-end?si=ba6caa9cb8554742b15e3501ba9c99eb&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

Instruments
Western guitar (acoustic recording), electric guitar (Telecaster), ride (acoustic recording), AD2 drums, EZbass, G-Force Mellotron string & french horn, Arturia V3 Minimoog, UVI 8-bit synth hits. NO AI.

I'm particularly interested in how you experience the vocals (in particular English pronunciation since I'm Dutch) and the mix. Not too bright? Not too much bass? Punch? Saturation? etc... Still pondering on whether to change the strings into less 'lo-fi" and less prominent ones, and whether to start later in the song with drums and synths. Tips are more than welcome.

I'm also wondering if the vocals aren't overdone in the sentimental department.
Of course, as always I'll be listening to your songs as well.

Lyrics
This is the end
My dear friend
This is the end
My lonely friend

This is goodbye
This is the end
The end

You said it was time
The battle is lost

This is the end
The end

There is no hope
The suffering unreal
You've been to the dark side
Not holding up
Decisions unreal
All the sadness and pain
On a cold sad winter day
You went away

This is goodbye
This is the end
The end
Goodbye

hey

been a little while
hope u enjoy!

Verse 1

Woke up full of dread
Loves spinning right round my head
I don't know how I'm supposed to feel
No one told me the rules of this deal

Pre Chorus

Am I ready for more?
To sell myself and soar?
Will I make it to the end?
I don't think I'm built to bend

Chorus

It's not fair, I'm not true
Where does love start and end with you?
Falling from heights unknown
Where do I fall on the spectrum of-?

Verse 2

Living like a needle stick
Full up but too dumb to quit
It's tearing me apart, right from my heart
I don't know if I'm capable of more

Pre Chorus

Am I ready to become?
To learn the ways of love?
Do you tell the truth?
I don't think that I do

Chorus

It's not fair, I'm not real
You said you loved me bout a hundred times right here
Pierced by cupids cursed arrow
Where do I fall if I don't trust-?

Bridge

Burned the bridges we walked over
Told you I was just hungover
Felt the fears I thought I wouldn't
Lied to keep the thoughts just prudent
Broke my heart without your help
I told you I loved you as well
It's hard to feel the happiness
When you need me to feel my best
And I could crash and burn so hard
And I could fuck this up, oh lord
There wouldn't be a reason though
So I'll just go on with the show
A wish is all it ends up being
A functioning unloved machine
And what it is is what it was
There's no way to feel like I'm loved

Chorus

It's not fair, I'm empty
You're the best thing to ever happen to me
I don't care, I'm just stuck
Thinking about all this artificial love

I'm not particularly a fan of Chris De Burgh—he's probably best known for Lady In Red, which was a decent song—but like many, I've sometimes wondered if the cloaked ferryman at the end of the Don't Pay the Ferryman music video is Tom Baker (Dr. Who). Purportedly, Tom Baker denied it, but the rumor persists today. So, who knows? LOL! Of all the things to wonder about, right? LOL! Who cares? 😂🤣

A quick update! I think I've finalized the lyrics for my new song, which are now edited in my previous post. I'll now work more on recording the full demo. With my businesses, I stay super busy with work projects, and I wish I had more time to engage in my love of songwriting. I think I only average about one new song, demo, and music video every 3-6 months. Some may think that's still too often! LOL!!! 😂🤣

Anyway, I'm excited about finishing this one and sending it off for a new music video soon. 😄🎶🎤

My ultimate goal for my songs is to buy time in a recording studio with session musicians and a sound engineer and make radio-ready versions of my songs -- not that I expect to ever be on the radio; I know I won't. But, it would be nice to have a full CD with my 15 best songs before I'm off to that big songwriter's forum in the sky someday! 😄

Cheers,
Joseph 😄

Quote from: Mora Amaro La Loba on May 12, 2025, 06:14 PMThank you so much, really appreciated your so detailed comment @icystorm
I love this song, lyrics here hace a special meaning to me.

@Mora Amaro La Loba - You're quite welcome. Your songs are always authentic, genuine, professional, and enjoyable to listen to! Keep the cool songs and videos coming!

Cheers,
Joseph

First half or so, nice ambiance...I like the production on that part. The part after the vocals...suitable for playing live, I would say. Something you can get into if your audience is grooving with you.

One suggestion--not a very important one. The first line in the second and fourth sections:

commit to it and lay down for a bit

I would change to

commit to it and lie down for a bit

But, like I said, not all that important.

vicki

I finally watched the psycho-thriller Locked with Anthony Hopkins over the past weekend. Overall, I found it to be a mediocre movie. I give it 4 of 10 stars. And after the initial hype months ago over The Age of Disclosure documentary about UFOs, there's been nothing but crickets surrounding it and no news of a release date.

Cheers,
Joseph