[tomcrocus]

Hi,
     when i wrote this i imagined it in my head sung live,
i don't know if it's too repetitive but this is what i came up with.

                               IT MIGHT GET LOUD

I've took some crap yeah i've faced the flak
you'd better be prepared yeah you at the back
my best friend Paddy he loves the craic
you'd better be prepared yeah you at the back
Mister Slipper give him the sack
you'd better be prepared yeah you at the back
my daddy he's a ripper and you call him Jack
you'd better be prepared yeah you at the back

you at the back,you at the back
you at the back be prepared
you at the back,you at the back
you at the back be prepared
you at the back and all the rest in the crowd
be prepared cos it might get loud

it might get loud be prepared
it might get loud you'd better beware
my daddy he's a ripper and you call him Jack
you'd better be prepared yeah you at the back

                     GUITAR BRIDGE

pay your money for your entry that music's black as coal
see that girl and the gentry drool cos she's dancing round a pole
not a lot is plenty it's easy on your soul
it's really elementary it's only rock n roll

you,you,you at the back
you,you,you at the back
you,you,you at the back
you'd better be prepared yeah you at the back
you,you,you at the back
you,you,you at the back
you at the back and all the rest in the crowd
be prepared cos it might get loud.

[Vintage54]

    Hi Tom,
       Like the idea behind this, and the title. I guess it is a little repetitive, but the right music can make it less so. But what i love most of all and what i think is just great, is the bridge. Those four lines are some of the best you've written, they roll off the page just begging to be sung.

                                Vintage54

[ScottLevi]

Hey Tom,

I quite like them to be fair - bit of attitude. The repetition could work but you'd have to have some interesting music imo.

Thinking Renegade Master or Champion Sound sort of energy.

[diademgrove]

Hi Tom,

reminds me of Sweet meets Oasis, not a bad thing. The only thing that didn't work for me was the "pay your money" section. It seemed a little clunky compared with the rest of the song. Maybe just my age.

Feel free to ignore me if it works for you.

Keith

[tomcrocus]

Vintage,Scott and Keith,
                                 thanks fellas for your feedback it's always appreciated,
it sort of works in my head but i can understand if people don't get it,
i'm cool with that.

THE SWEET, i used to love that band when i was a kid,you can't beat
a little bit of BALLROOM BLITZ or FOX ON THE RUN,
"for fox sake fox on the run",how funny is that!!!,yeah they got
away with it,check it out,
                                    cheers, Tom.

[finestrat]

Hi Tom

I can see this making a good rock song, quite raucous and bags of energy with the right music.
I'd maybe change It's only rock n roll (Stones song) to a piece of rock n roll or something else.  Only nitpicking really.

[adamfarr]

This all seems to flow out really easily - and some really original touches as always.
For some reason I hear Green Day - I guess it's got some of that "wild but clever" punky attitude.
Sounds like a song not just a lyric if you know what I mean. Nothing forced and very down to earth but the meaning comes across very strongly.

[Neil C]

Good work as ever with its rhyming wordplay
Tom Crocus, Mister rhyming focus.
Rgds
Neil