[PeteS]

A lot of you know that I work with a mate, Neil, who write most of the lyrics for my songs.  Well his mum has been suffering from Dementia, so he wrote these words. 

The initial song i came up with was pretty dull if I am honest so it was placed on a shelf probably ever to be see again.  But now, she only has a few weeks to live, he asked if I would work on it.

So here is it, it's nothing like the original, it's darker, more passionate, more real I guess. It also shows how I have come on since starting on this journey of writing and recording.  This is not my preferred style, tonally I found it difficult and vocally, it is the most my voice has ever been exposed!

I hope you like it, but I will still polish it further if you have great ideas.

Thanks for listening.



This life, it's a cruel one, that I, I just can’t change
Our time,  is oh so short, and yet, it’s still so strange
 
So much faster than slow motion
the pain of this erosion

No comfort lies in the destiny
In the end there’s no identity
It’s hard, to take, this injustice
I said It’s hard, to take, this injustice

Tomorrow, it don’t exist, 'cause it’s,  always today
A life, where there is just,  I said  there is just, no yesterday

No pills will deny the wave
Just a flood that drowns the brave
 
No comfort lies in the destiny
In the end there’s no identity
It’s hard, to take, this injustice
I said It’s hard, to take, this injustice

It seems the mind is willing to play
But the memory's gone missing......Today
It seems the mind is willing to play
But the memory's gone missing......Today
What do we do, What do we do, What do we do
Now that she don't remember?


There'll be lots of stories of the good old days, But
She don't remember my name
There'll be lots of stories of the good old days, But
She don't remember my name

This life, it's a cruel one, that I, I just can’t change

[Elvis Nash]

Yes that dementia is a cruel one.
You did a great job on a dark subject people can relate to
Very good production , clear vocals with a story
thumbs up !!! 

[ChrisPrice]

It's a tough job putting stuff like this over in the right way, but you've done a great job here. If you intend to polish it up further, I'd maybe work on the vocal fx. There's nothing wrong with the vocal at all, but it could cut through a little more.

'It seems the mind is willing to play, But the memory's gone missing......Today' Clever words that say it all.

My Grandma ended her days with dementia. It's horrible for the sufferer and horrible to witness.

[CorkingCrackBand]

Hi @PeteS

A very pleasantly atmospheric track. I like the sound of those drums, they give  a strength to the otherwise quite sparse arrangement. The chorus is powerful and gives the song something really memorable to hang it's hat on, so to speak. You voice is spot on, strong and emotive whilst somewhat plaintive. My only suggestion would be that I was hoping for soaring solo after the chorus (or is it a bridge - I'm useless with terms, the 3:15 section) but I also understand not wanting to embellish it and to keep the song rooted in it's lyrical meaning - which is very poignant and well done.

All the best,

CCB

[moraamarolaloba]

wonderful sadness, a vey moving song with so special lyrics!! @PeteS

[MonnoDB]

@PeteS - this is really, really good.. I think you did a fine job in putting the mood and sentiment across while still the overriding impression on me while listening is that it is a beautiful song with the sadness tangible and real. I think your harmonies really hammer that beauty and sadness home. It's just wonderful. Maybe my favourite song I've heard from you.

"She can't remember my name" - heartbreaking.. I think this might be one of the best songs I've heard on the subject.. I will say that it touches a nerve as my mother has Alzheimer's so I'm dealing with this myself the last 8 years. (I've also written a song about it - very different to this but if you want to check it out it's called "As we wait" on my SC).

Kudos, respect... great job you two and my heart goes out to Neil.

K

[CaliaMoko]

I do think the setting suits the lyric well; you did a great job with this.

[PeteS]

Thank you so much for the positive comments.

@Elvis Nash It is a difficult subject Elvis so thanks.

@ChrisPrice Thanks Chris, I'll look at the vocals agin for the final mix but if you have suggestions, i'd love to hear them.

@CorkingCrackBand I did think about some sort of instrumental bridge (Solos aren't usually muy tghing tbh) but I fwlt the song was already long.  But as an album track, that probably doesn't matter, so I'll take a look.

@moraamarolaloba Thanks Mora

@MonnoDB Thanks Karen.  It is tough trying to get this across, especially when I am not the one feeling it so your words are really appreciated.  I listened to As We Wait, it's beautiful, and unusual to hear a guitar without @Jambrains. 

@CaliaMoko  Thanks Vicki.