i wrote this song a while ago.. already wrote the music and such.. but here are the lyrics.. seemed right to share it in this post instead of offering a critique.. seems more useful somehow.
btw the song i wrote is called fairytales
fairytales
he lived by the river
and he lived by your side
but he could never bank
on the tears in your eyes
and he slept in your parlour
made love by the dawn
but your eyelids just flickered
at the men on your lawn
and he lept off the mattress
he lept off the page
the day that he lost you
and you went away
and he built some skyscraper
roughly advertised
that you weren't the apple
or the spark in his eye
and he wrote you a love song
but you couldn't hear
this song aint about love
it's a song about fear
she danced in the summer
and she kissed in the gloom
but she could never quite shake
the feeling of doom
and she counted the pidgeons
that flew under the bridge
but she always lost count
when she thought what she did
and she fell from the gutter
a long long way down
to sewers and minions
that lived underground
and the boy by the river
he looked and cried out
he said theres nothing
but you i couldn't do without
and she wrote you a love song
but you couldn't hear
this song aint about love
it's a song about fear
locked up in the castle
she played with her hair
awaiting shining heroes
with a reflective glare
and she stood on the ramparts
she stood by his side
but the jaws of their dungeons
held darkness inside
and she longed for the freedom
to hold someone dear
not consumed with treasure chests
or dragons to fear
and the red night beseiged them
with a wizard in the ranks
as their walls tumbled down
they gave thier thanks
and we wrote us a love song
but we couldn't hear
this song ain't about love
it's a song about fear
