[cathareena]

Pleeease feedback! I am not a native so please tell me if there are any grammatical mistakes or if there is something that sounds weird to a native ear ! Thanks!


            IN LOVE WITH MY SLEEP

Every night I’m cuddling with my love affair
I am as happy as one can be (cosy)
between us lies peacefully my teddy bear
we are a perfect team of three
 
dont you  dont you dont you dont you wake up
dont you dont you dont you wake me up (zum wecker)

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock


this thing has always been my enemy
 with its annoying cheeping sound
whenever my love and I are as close as close can be
it ruins our romantic harmony

Hey I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock
the alarm clock

dont you  dont you dont you dont you wake u u u u p
dont you dont you dont you dare to wake me u u u up (zum wecker

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

[S.T.C]

It`s what they call twee, sort of a lullaby ,child like theme.who do you think would use this sort of lyric?mit`s not that it couldn't be used.T/V or film....can`t see it has a regular song?

[Tester345]

Pleeease feedback! I am not a native so please tell me if there are any grammatical mistakes or if there is something that sounds weird to a native ear ! Thanks!


            IN LOVE WITH MY SLEEP

Every night I’m cuddling with my love affair
I am as happy as one can be (cosy)
between us lies peacefully my teddy bear
we are a perfect team of three
 
dont you  dont you dont you dont you wake up
dont you dont you dont you wake me up (zum wecker)

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock


this thing has always been my enemy
 with its annoying cheeping sound
whenever my love and I are as close as close can be
it ruins our romantic harmony

Hey I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock
the alarm clock

dont you  dont you dont you dont you wake u u u u p
dont you dont you dont you dare to wake me u u u up (zum wecker

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

Cause I`m in love with my sleep sleep sleep
and everytime it goes beep beep beep
Id like to run amok
kill the alarm clock

I like this! It's cute and it's rather truthful in its approach

[diademgrove]

Hi Cathereena,

reminds me a bit of the Beatles I'm Only Sleeping. I'd change "kill" to "smash". Killing the alarm clock could mean turning it off and getting up. I think smashing gives a better indication of your feelings.

When I read the lyrics I heard an angry song, not a lullaby. I like your words.

diadem