[marketkv95]

I wrote this song last summer just after losing a girlfriend. Please let me know what you think, I'll accept any kind of criticism.

'What Happened to the Good Times?'
I gave you an excuse
You used it leave me
I didn't know what was going on
You were there with me, but now you're gone

What happened to the good times?
Was it something I did wrong?
You took my heart and threw it away
Now you got nothin' left to say

I tried to talk to you
You gave me cold replies
You said you never wanted it to die
Well I guess that was all a lie

What happened to the good times?
Was it something I did wrong?
You took my heart and threw it away
Now you got nothin' left to say

You wouldn't let me call you
You wouldn't let me hold you
You wouldn't let me kiss you
You wouldn't let me love you

We never had a good time
The memories are gone
The blame is all on you
I did nothing wrong

[Paulski]

Firstly, welcome to the forum!
Here's what I liked about your lyrics:
 - I loved the title and how you stuck to that theme.
 - You get to the title fast - after only one verse in - nice
 - good rhymimg - nothing too easy/cheesy
 - the bridge is especially good
Suggestions for improvement:
 - sometimes the meter changes verse-verse (but if it fits the music you're OK)
 - the rhyme scheme for the last verse in different from the others (this will throw the listener a bit of a curve, unless that is what you want to do)
 - some of the lyrics are a bit cliche e.g. "now you're gone", "threw my heart away"
 - maybe the bridge should be in present tense - "You won't let me.." otherwise, it wasn't much of a relationship in the first place..
Overall, a good write with all the elements of classic break-up song.
Paul

[tokenangmoh]

Hello and welcome!

+1 to everything Paul said.

My favourite part is:

We never had a good time
The memories are gone
The blame is all on you
I did nothing wrong

Such stark statements showing us all the pain and denial underneath... Very nice!

For the rest of the lyric, while it is perfectly good, it doesn't grab me any harder than similar, well-executed break-up lyrics usually do. Is there something specific - something unique to your relationship - that you could put in there to make a stronger connection to the reader / listener?

I do hope you stick around, introduce yourself, and get stuck in reviewing!

Matt

[hardtwistmusic]

I wrote this song last summer just after losing a girlfriend. Please let me know what you think, I'll accept any kind of criticism.

'What Happened to the Good Times?'
I gave you an excuse
You used it leave me
I didn't know what was going on
You were there with me, but now you're gone

What happened to the good times?
Was it something I did wrong?
You took my heart and threw it away
Now you got nothin' left to say

I tried to talk to you
You gave me cold replies
You said you never wanted it to die
Well I guess that was all a lie

What happened to the good times?
Was it something I did wrong?
You took my heart and threw it away
Now you got nothin' left to say

You wouldn't let me call you
You wouldn't let me hold you
You wouldn't let me kiss you
You wouldn't let me love you

We never had a good time
The memories are gone
The blame is all on you
I did nothing wrong

You start out great. 

"'What Happened to the Good Times?'
I gave you an excuse
You used it leave me
I didn't know what was going on
You were there with me, but now you're gone"

What makes it great is the dual thread going on....
The narrator/singer/songwriter is ACCEPTING ACCOUNTABILITY by admitting the he/she DID something that could be used as an "excuse."  Blaming the person who dumped him/her BUT also admitting some blame himself.  So far, this is compelling because it's real. 

THEN..... nothing.  After this opening line, it's all the fault of the person who left. 

"You dumped me and it might be my own fault" is interesting and real.

"What is wrong with you for dumping me" is neither real, nor interesting. 

Your Chorus works well.  I have one small nit with it, but it works well. 
"What happened to the good times?
Was it something I did wrong?
You took my heart and threw it away
Now you got nothin' left to say" ------------   In this (the ultimate line to the chorus) I'd suggest that you leave the "now" off the beginning of the line.  More drama without it, and it seems to hurt the meter.

As far as the rest of your verses, they are lyrically fine, and DO add to our understanding.  If I were writing this song, I'd feel that it needed a bridge that was very different musically, and "turned the tone around" by turning the tone BACK to what your first line suggests... that this just very possibly MIGHT be your (i.e. the singer/narrator/songwriter's) own damned fault.  THEN, the whole song remains real and interesting. 

I think that would make it an exceptional lyric.