Hi,
I felt the only thing missing from the song writing side was an in your face chorus. I thought maybe the wanted alive or dead could be it but it sounds more like a middle 8 (or bridge, if you prefer) as it takes the song down a little.
I found it a bit difficult to catch all the words, sign of my age, so it would help if you could please post the lyrics.
If you disagree feel free to ignore me,
a good beginning to a very good song,
Keith