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Kindness

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Bleedin Boy

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« on: October 12, 2014, 08:52:29 PM »

I'm back. This song was inspired by the times when you might need to do something negative in order to receive some kindness, as you're unable to find it anywhere else. Thank you for my mention in the song of the month competition despite not being eligible. I appreciate all your feedback on my previous effort and I look forward to receiving more. Thank you.

                                                            Kindness

Don't ask what happened, when would you need to know
It shows on the outside, that you don't need to know
When next time they're gone, do you remember they were there
If you think that I need you, why weren't you there

Oh Kindness you came with a sting this time,
No Kindness you won't stick around this time,
And I know, but it don't matter no,
Cuz if I need you again, you might come again

What is your guess if you think that you see
That spills outside but somehow stays in me
How can I tell what's some kind of flirtation from Hell

Oh Kindness you came with a sting this time,
No Kindness you won't stick around this time,
And I know, but it don't matter no,
Cuz if I need you again, you might come again

What might not appear from pieces of a promise
No danger cry could be heard from this
This portrait, with one shade of paint when faded
Feels the same but to nobodies is replaced

Oh Kindness you came with a sting this time,
No Kindness you won't stick around this time,
And I know, but it don't matter no,
Cuz if I need you again, you might come again

jonpromos

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« Reply #1 on: October 13, 2014, 06:10:39 PM »
A little bit hard to figure out without looking back. You've put more emphasis on musicality, but at the price of flow. Which explains the exact rhymes. 'Know, no.' 'Again, again'. 'Tell, hell'. This still might go good with music. Keep writing whatever you're comfortable with. An artist's inner most instincts are always right.
When hope fails a servant or prey,
Anger frees him from all the chains,
If hope disappoints, anger prevails,
And freedom is worth all the pain.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s3CrpsrkEt0