Hi guys and gals,
I'm new to this forum, nad needed like-minded people to help give me some hints and positive criticism on the lyrics i've wrote.
The lyrics are based on wanting to know who a person truly is, and not just basing them for what they are on their outside appearance. True relationships - romantic or friendships - come through some form of knowing the persons true feelings, and not being afraid or shy to open up and share their thoughts and feelings.
I know this isn't of any use, but my influences for starting writing came through John Mayer. He is a good lyricist, and his song meanings can be meaningful and deep from his 3rd-5th albums.
Structure is as follows - Verse 1, Chorus, Verse 2, Chorus, Pre-chorus, Chorus.
Let me know what you guys think.
Thanks,
David.
Verse 1
Come draw near, I’ve something to say
Your darkest secrets, I will take
Your beauty, your sorrow, your peace, your shame
I’m knocking your door, let me in
Chorus
Open your heart, speak your thoughts and put them in a bundle
It’s OK, cause I’ll be your crutch when you begin to stumble
What you cherish and hold dear to your soul
We will become closer when you let me know
Verse 2
Your facial make-up is the realest thing
It can mask who you truly are, just from that smile you give
You’re a gamble, though a risk I’m willing to take
A work of art, a magical mystery
Pre-Chorus:
If I know, and you know it’s right
Through your darkness, I’ll shine a light