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« on: April 05, 2015, 03:25:34 AM »
Okay so a friend asked me to write a song about quote; being too damaged to commit to someone, so I gave it a shot, let me know what you think and I'd love some suggestions for improvements!

Commitment
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She puts her hands on me
I can’t help but wonder just where they’ve been
Just want to let it go
But I’m scared there’s something I don’t know

Back in my own bed
There’s no worried voices in my head
But with her lips on mine
I can’t seem to act like it’s alright


She asks if she can see me next week
I pray that I’ve got somewhere to be
I love her so damn much but it scares me


She tries to keep me safe
While I pray for some kind of escape
She asks to meet my friends
But I’m just wishing for the end

Wish I could let her in
But I’m terrified I’ll feel something
It’s too late to tell her now
I wanna be alone to figure myself out


I drink all the fluids straight
Just to feel the poison in my brain
I wonder what the hell is wrong with me?

I wish that I could just have faith
But love is driving me insane
I know I’ve got to get away
16, singer-songwriter

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