Hi, dear songwriters
I've recently registered and happily logged in. I am a looser songwriter for about 10 years already
. Having read some of songwriter's lyrics I decided to get one of mine checked out.
Warning! English is not native to me. Normally, I speak Kazakh and Russian. So, please, could you comment this lyrics to help me improve them if they crack gentle Englishman's ears
. Thanx everyone who does.
“Consolation prize”
I don’t know who you are
And I don’t care what.
I need someone this beautiful tonight
To cure (heal) my broken heart.
Who’d tell me what was wrong?
Everything looked so right.
It’s strange of one to get suddenly gone
With a stranger in the night.
It got me so
Jealous, empty and even mad.
I can’t laugh,
I can’t cry,
But I’m still feeling bad.
But now you’re here
And you look a single bird.
Why not?
Just why not
Make some brighter my world?
Refrain: And let us dance
Till the Sun rises in the Sky.
I like your glance.
It’s so nice welcoming me tonight.
I know you would,
You would call me an abandoned wild.
You’ve saved my heart.
I would call you my consolation prize.
You are no worse than mine.
You’re even better some.
You’re good enough but I just have to state,
I love another one.
We need no words.
You are dancing me away
Out of pain,
Out of sadness
And loneliness shade.
Your single kiss,
Oh, artificially respired
Both my breathe
And my heart,
Everything what’s inside.
Now I’m non-stop.
You’re my Savior No1.
We shall dance.
We shall drink
As long as we can
