Hey seriousfun, thanks for your post on my piece.
This is most effective when invoking strong imagery than listing adjectives. The difference between lines like "hiding the ordinary things", which I think is an effective aside into your vision and introduce your ideas really well, and "dark, ethereal and strange", which remind me of Google's ability to provide synonyms, is striking. I would prefer to continue reading more of the former than the latter, as it's far more interesting unique an ode to your ideas. You turn again to the stronger imagery toward the end (though I would like a little more spark than 'demons dance', I guess), so I think just a few lines could be looked at in regards to this point. Pretty solid throughout.
Have a good day.