[Peppermint]

Hello everyone,

It's been quite a while since I've posted any lyrics on this forum.
But I've been suffering with really bad writers block lately and it's becoming very hard for me to write songs which is a shame as I really enjoy writing them.

Anyway I've managed to finally write a new song,
It's about a guy who's going through a bad time in life and is regretting the mistakes he's made.

Hope you like it.

Peppermint

Iv'e Thrown My Life Away

Verse 1

I thought that one day,
That I would be someone,
Like a decent guy everyone would rely upon.
But........ That day is still yet to come.

Verse 2

I skipped too much school,
Missed out on my degree,
Became the black sheep in the family,
But...... I know I can't be the only one.

Pre Chorus

Some say,
Our lives are set out by fate,
Getting changed by the decisions,
And the mistakes we make.

But my little hearts,
taken all it can take,
And its only getting worse,
With every step I take.

Chorus

Because everyday,
Seems dark and grey,
And I can't help but feel.....
That I've thrown my life away,

Because everyday,
Seems dark and grey,
And I can't help but feel.....
That I've thrown my life away,

Bridge

I have a life with no direction,
And I'm in a place too dark to mention,

Chorus

Because everyday,
Seems dark and grey,
And I can't help but feel.....
That I've thrown my life away,

Because everyday,
Seems dark and grey,
And I can't help but feel.....
That I've thrown my life away,

Outro

Yeah I've my life away.....

[hardtwistmusic]

I liked the lyric.  I'll have to return later (after I've had coffee) and read it again to get any helpful critique for you. 

Just out of curiousity, WHERE in the songwriting process are you finding yourself blocked? 

New ideas not coming?  Or just can't finalize?   Or getting stuck in the middle somewhere? 

If we know where you are getting blocked, some of us might have some tricks or strategies for getting through the blockage. 

Good luck. 

[igg]

Good start!!!

I guess I would like to know...
Is this... a lament......(this is the way I am and nothing is gonna change it?)
Is this... a plea for someone to care.................(If only someone would reach out to me.)
Is this.... resolving to change.........(this is the way it's been and no I'm going to try something different)
Is this... leave me alone.......... (this is the way I am get used to it..)
Is this ....?
I think running the character through these questions might move you along....  actually writing verses with each of these ideas in mind is a good exercise,... and then feeling your way through which is true....

igg

[Peppermint]

Thanks for the feedback so far 

I guess the song is about him trying to say how bad his life is/was and he wants people to understand how bad his life is and wants other to feel sorry for him.

At the moment I'm finding it hard to think of subjects/situations to write about in songs.
And if I do come up with an Idea I struggle to get past the first verse   

Peppermint

[EpiphoneEpiphany]

hi

interesting read and topic for a song

I think you could make the whole song a bit tighter if you cut the last 4 lines of the pre-chorus
or at least the one with "entitled to"

it reads really well without those lines

hope that was helpful, of course feel free to diagree if you like the lyrics as they are

cheers

EE

[Lyriclee]

Hi,

I really like the honesty of your lyrics! In particual my favourite part is:

Some say,
Our lives are set out by fate,
Getting changed by the decisions,
And the mistakes we make.

Very deep and meaningful!  Really tells a story!

Lee

[Paulski]

Hi Peppermint

Nice to see you back with your green text !
It does have a minty look!
I think this is good but it's message is a little depressing as it stands now.
I think it would be cool if you could lift the chorus by her/him saying that they want to prove that they haven't thrown their life away. Don't think it would need too many changes to put a +tive spin on it. And I agree with EE - the prechorus seems a bit long - could be made into two later verses IMO.

But feel free to ignore me!
Paul

[Peppermint]

hi

interesting read and topic for a song

I think you could make the whole song a bit tighter if you cut the last 4 lines of the pre-chorus
or at least the one with "entitled to"

it reads really well without those lines

hope that was helpful, of course feel free to diagree if you like the lyrics as they are

cheers

EE

Hello EE,Paulski and Lyriclee

Totally agree with you (EE) and (Paulski) in regards to getting rid of the last 4 lines in the pre chorus.
Even i was considering it but now others have said it as well I'm definitely going to get rid of it.

Also Paulski I agree with you that the chorus could be rewritten to make out that the person hasn't thrown their life away. Although it might take me a while to think of a new chorus for it.And yes I do like to make the the most of the green text color tool on here haha  

And finally Lyriclee, I'm glad you like that part of the song.
Think its probably the best lines in the lyric too  

Peppermint