[SoundBuckle]

Hey everyone, would love some feedback on this. The quality of the recording really isn't great. And the syncing is slightly out at times. There's a part which I'm planning on throwing a guitar solo over.

Unfortunately I don't have any more time this weekend to perfect it, but would love some feedback on it!

http://soundcloud.com/soundbuckle/fifteen-months

Lyrics:

Not the most romantic weekend
But one we'll never forget
Rubber boots and plastic coats, yeah
Forever imprinted in my head

Fifteen months from when it began
Celebrate with music and
Fist pumps, shoulder bumps, strobe lights, high fives,
Nobody's setting this house on fire

No no,
No no,
No no
x2

It started with drinks just downstairs
I looked in a mirror so debonair
Overcrowded room, full of people
I stuck to you like a wasp to treacle

Why do I feel like somethings missing
You never know who might be listening
Against advice I try to say
Let's save this for another day

But no
No no
No no
No no
x2

--Guitar solo coming soon :p --

No no
No no
No no




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So, what do you guys think? Thanks everyone! Have a great day!

[TomAtkins1991]

Hi SoundBuckle.

I enjoy this recording! The melody is really strong and the hook is great.
Lyrically however, I feel that it is all over the place at the moment. Honestly, I'm not even sure what it's about? Perhaps I've totally misunderstood it, but I would suggest a rewrite? The verses are so strong melodically, and the 'no' hook is a total keeper.
As I said, I enjoy this recording and think you have a great voal here too!

[SoundBuckle]

Well first off let me say thank you for the compliments on the vocals and melody!

As for the lyrics, they're about my girlfriend. The first two are written about the time we spent at a music festival. The second two are written about when we first kissed, and one of us was in a relationship. I get what you're saying though, and to be honest I'm trying to rewrite the final verse as it didn't seem to feel right when I put it to paper.

Thanks for the comments! I'm going to try to get a better quality recording soon, too.

[Ramshackles]

Nive rhythm to it and a unique voice. Would like to see that pushed forward in the mix a bit more. I would say you really need to work on getting a nice guitar tone - play around with eq and reverb etc, and also get it really in tune!

[SoundBuckle]

Thanks for the reply Ramshackles. Yeah, as I said, the recording itself isn't a brilliant quality. I'm fairly new to it, think I'm gonna re-record it with high gain and treble, and a bit of reverb. Great help, thanks!

[postmn]

killer intro and beat, awesome and orginal song,it kind of reminds me of paulo nutini and his style of singing, keep em coming

[misswhiterabbit]

I really like this!!

Yeah the guitar tone isn't great but that can easily be remedied. The lyrics for me are really interesting, unique and phonetically they've got a lovely rhythm and tembre. I love the vocals, excited to hear more!! Get on it!

Overcrowded room, full of people
I stuck to you like a wasp to treacle  nice rhyme! I love unusual rhymes.