This is a first draft, please critique
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I don't have a title yet. It was written in the style of Taio Cruz, Neo and artists I'm that vein. It's the very first draft so it's not very good but tell me what you think anyways.
(VERSE 1)
Baby do you love me?
Do I give you everything that you need?
Baby can I hold you?
Or are you gonna watch as I bleed, for you?
(PRE)
Cause I need you babe
And I breathe you babe
I want you to love me babe
Think of how good we could be, yeahh.
(CHORUS)
Malibu and Marlboro Golds
When they're gonna will I have you to hold
Malibu and Marlboro Golds
Would you forget what you've been told
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh)
When they're gonna will I have you to hold
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh huh)
Would you forget what you've been told
(VERSE 2)
Are you just using me?
If you are, I cannot stay
Do you even love me?
If not, why don't you push me away?
(PRE)
Cause I need you babe
And I breathe you babe
I want you to love me babe
Think of how good we could be, yeahh.
(CHORUS)
Malibu and Marlboro Golds
When they're gonna will I have you to hold
Malibu and Marlboro Golds
Would you forget what you've been told
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh)
When they're gonna will I have you to hold
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh huh)
Would you forget what you've been told
(MID
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If you ain't here for the ride
(Get of the train)
If you ain't staying the night
(Don't call me baby)
If you don't need me in your life
(Why am I here?)
I ain't staying the night
(If you don't want me)
(CHORUS)
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh)
When they're gonna will I have you to hold
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh huh)
Would you forget what you've been told
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh)
When they're gonna will I have you to hold
Malibu and Marlboro Golds (uh huh huh)
Would you forget what you've been told
Uh huh, Uh huh