Yes! I agree. Some in depth reviews. Ok.
"I felt so tearful,
the day we broke up,
But now I know it’s ok,
Coz I’m no fool."
To me this looks like a middle 8. You seem to be missing a verse after the first chorus. From how I read it you would end with the 'fool' as a hang or an imperfect cadence.
Your song seems to be following the form: B A B C B (where B is your chorus, A your verse and C your middle
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The choice to start with the chorus is not one I'd do personally, but my songs are different to yours, and your poppy song may suit that. So you need a form that is B A B A C B. At the moment you are missing the second A.
Some of the lyrics are weak. A lot of questions are left unanswered, such as why do you suddenly know now it's ok? Try to invoke some imagery. So much is left unexplained in the story. Why did you break up?
Again back to this, this bit is just begging a twist to it: I rewrote your middle 8 to show how easy it is to put some images in someones mind.
"I felt so tearful,
the day we broke up,
But now I know it’s ok,
Coz I’m no fool."
BECOMES -
"I've got pages in my diary stained with tears from our break up,
My Facebook photos show mascara trails down my make up
But now I forgive you, I didn't think I'd ever be ok,
Like at the time I didn't guess you could be gay."
I hope this helped?
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