[KEVIN B]

hi everyone, not posted a song for some time now, had lots going on, but I have still been writing,
here is a song called into the light, hope you guys like it,
Kev !
it's about all those people who are a little timid, shy, unsure of themselves, who  avoid the spotlight, and can always be found in the background !

OOOH OOOH OOOH AH AH AHH A HAA
OOOH OOOH OOOH AH AH AHH A HAA
         AHH AHH

YOU  ALWAYS STAND IN THE SHADOWS
TO AFRAID TO LET YOURSELF SHINE
YOU WOULD MAKE YOU'RE WAY TO THE
BACK OF THE QUEUE,
INSTEAD OF HEADING TOO THE FRONT
OF THE LINE.

YOU NEVER FIND THE COURAGE TO
BELIEVE IN YOURSELF
LETTING OTHERS TAKE THE SPOTLIGHT
YET YOU'RE ALWAYS THE FIRST WITH
A SHOULDER TO CRY ON
ANYTIME' DAY OR NIGHT.
(CHORUS)
        SO STEP OUT FROM THE DARKNESS
        AND INTO THE LIGHT,
        LET THE WHOLE WORLD SEE
        HOW YOU'RE SHINING BRIGHT
        OOOH-OOOH-AHOOO  OOOH-OOOH-AHOOO
        SHINING SO BRIGHTLY TONIGHT

YOU DON'T HAVE TO BE THE BIGGEST
DIAMOND, YOU DON'T HAVE TO BE
THE BRIGHTEST STAR.
JUST STAY TRUE TO WHO YOU
ARE INSIDE, AND PEOPLE WILL
LOVE YOU, FOR WHO YOU ARE!!
(BRIDGE)
        BECAUSE WE ALL GET A LITTLE SCARED AT TIMES,
        DAYS WHEN THE DARKNESS COMES ROLLING IN
        THATS WHEN YOU HAVE TO REACH DEEP INSIDE,
        OPEN UP, AND LET THE LIGHT SHINE IN !
(CHORUS)
        SO STEP OUT FROM THE DARKNESS
        AND INTO THE LIGHT
        LET THE WHOLE WORLD SEE
        HOW YOU'RE SHINING BRIGHT
        OOOH-OOOH-AHOOO OOOH-OOOH AHOOO
        SHINING SO BRIGHTLY TONIGHT
        
WRITTEN BY KEVIN BOWDLER..........DOC 15/072014.......(C)        

[benjo]

 HEY KEVIN,

 i really like this a good subject used many times before
 but you do have a way of putting the original spin in there
 good story well told

 i'd love to hear this put to music hopefully soon

             GOOD LUCK KEVIN


                         tony...

[JakePage]

Hey Kev,

Great original lyrics here, a good subject that you haven't overly complicated.
I don't know if it was because of the beginning haha, but for some reason I was picturing this being sung by Motley Crue...Go figure. You've written this in a way that brings the words to life, I dont know what style you intend this to be, but it comes across very energetic.

Good work,

Jake

[KEVIN B]

Benjo
Jake

thanks fellas for the comments, difficult subject, tried to put a different spin on it, not sure if it has
worked or not, not totally happy with certain areas, but can always change at later date.

Benjo,  was thinking a sort of my immortal evernessance' type of feel for this one, that's what I have in my head anyway.

will keep you posted, 

Kev.

[Paulski]

Hi I really liked the chorus in this - I can hear a lift in the music and see imagery of lights coming on so however you did that to me - good one! The bridge is also well written - switching to third person for perspective - perfect approach to a bridge. For the verses, I think they would be more interesting if they were present tense instead of past tense. For example "You always stand in the shadows" seems more like something you would say to someone than "You would always.." and "You never find the courage..." again would be more conversational IMHO.
Great title - maybe even "Step Into the Light" could work and describe the song better.
Ignore me if I'm off track here!
Nice work!
Paul

[KEVIN B]

Hi paulski,

you're spot on mate, those small changes really do make all the difference, thanks for that I will do exactly that,

listened to your track the other day, well impressed mate, not spoken to you on the forum before, as I have not been active for a while.

What I have heard, and what I have read of your material is great, so thanks for the helpful hints mate.
cheers
Kev !

[Neil C]

Kev,

Liked the concept and some good lines in there - 'making the way to the back of the queue'
One or two of the longer lines may be interesting to sing but you'd won't know till its got some music.
 
Neil

[DevyE]

Hi Kev

I like the inspirational lyric, I also believe the verses should be present tense. I do struggle to find a consistent flow between the verses but I'm sure you have a melody that works. The third verse appears a little preachy to me, to be consistent with the previous verses I would change the angle to something like :

You don't believe you're a diamond
Or can be a shooting star.........


I also feel the lyric could be tightened slightly such as :

You always stand in the shadows
Afraid to let yourself shine
You make your way to the back of the queue
Instead of the front of the line

A couple of small lyrical suggestions:

others share the limelight to others take the limelight.


 into the light to And embrace the light.

 Good luck with song.

[KEVIN B]

Hi devyE

yeh some good suggestions there mate, it's always good to get other peoples opinions, and sometimes it's the smallest changes that make all the difference, when it comes to putting music to the lyrics.

cheers mate

Kev !

[Erik Baker]

I relate to the message. I hope you'll have powerful vocals for this song.

[Kevin j]

these are well written, and seem like a sort of poppy lyric to me, i dont know if thats how you want it to come cross or not, a great subject to write on, the only thing i didnt realy like about the lyric was the 'tonight' at the end of the chorus, it just seems a little cheesy to me, but thats only my opinion,
hope this helps

[KEVIN B]

hi kevin

thanks for the comments, I must admit that is the part of the song i'm
not to happy with myself, so I agree with you mate.

Will try and come up with something to replace it !

cheers mate

Kev !

[Paulski]

hi kevin

thanks for the comments, I must admit that is the part of the song i'm
not to happy with myself, so I agree with you mate.

Will try and come up with something to replace it !

cheers mate

Kev !

Hey Kev
Been watching this thread..
It would be cool if you could fit the word "life" in there somehow like:
"Your life is shining bright" or similar for that last line. Just a thought.
Really like these lyrics!
Paul