-Verse-
There is something that hides in the back of my mind.
I dull it but still feel the pain.
Like a crooked vine that's withered and dying,
I fight it but it still remains
-chorus-
I am sinking deeper and I reach for a helping hand
I am falling further into black quicksand
-Verse-
Like the time we waste and let it drift away
The scene replays in my mind.
Through the hour glass I watched the sand slip past
How come I have been so blind?
-chorus-
I am sinking deeper and I reach for a helping hand
I am falling further into black quicksand
-verse-
In our dreams at night we fly so high
The only time we're free
Far away from this place
A world in disgrace and a future that I cannot see.
-chorus-
I am sinking deeper and I reach for a helping hand
I am falling further into black quicksand
-end-
I also think that Black Quicksand is a great title. Like Dogmax, I had some ideas which might help.
verse 1 There is something that lurks in the back of my mind
I hide it but still feel the pain
Like a withered vine, crooked and dying
I fight it but still it remains
Chorus I am sinking deeper, I reach for a helping hand
I am at the mercy of this black, black quicksand
I thought that something different in Line 2 of the chorus because the words already say in line 1 that 'I am sinking deeper' which really describes the effect of the quicksand and so to be at it's mercy seems more dramatic than 'falling further'.
This is just what I thought but not saying my ideas would be better but could be worth a try.
Good luck with the song and would like to hear it with the music when possible.
Marrianna