This is a lyric I threw together yesterday and am currently exploring ideas musically to record it. I think its going to take me a a few days to get my ideas together so I have time to get feedback on the lyrics before I record, an unusual circumstance for me. With that in mind, I would love some feedback from writers out there to see if there is any way I can improve this, especially the bridge, not convinced I have this right.
Thanks in advance.
Maggies Baby.
She leaves her dusty footprints as she walks out on the jetty once again
She sits upon the wooden seat that’s felt the bums of countless fishermen
contemplating her damnation could the sea be her salvation
with no one near to cast a line,
there’s no one there to read the warning sign
Oh Maggies going for a swim today
Oh Maggies gonna let the tide, take her away
Maggies hair blows in the breeze reminding her of chances swept away
Her toes ripple in the sea and break reflections of her hearts dismay
A hand upon her swollen tum, she feels a kick her tears undun
With a child to bring into her life
But no man around, to make her his wife
Oh Maggies going for a swim today
Oh Maggies gonna let the tide, take her away
And then a duck floats by,
A line of ducklings in her wake
Its all so clear now in her mind
She nearly made a grave mistake
Oh Maggies going for a swim today
Oh Maggies gonna have her baby, here to stay
(c) APRA 2015