I'm new to this, I don't want to annoy anyone with my comments, I'm trying to fit in first.
Just saying.
It's not about annoying anyone my friend, it's about giving an honest review of someone's work. As long as you qualify your comments and don't just say something like "this is crap" then no one should get annoyed and if they do, then they shouldn't post their lyrics in the first place.
With regard to your lyrics, there's some good imagery in your verses and they seem to tell a story, albeit an incomplete one. The verses may have some issues around syllable count and meter but that can be easily solved.
My main problem is with the chorus. There seems to be a disconnect from the narrative. Not sure where the whole 'badlands' theme fits into the rest of the story. In saying that, when the music is added it could be a catchy tune as you get the hook in plenty of times.
