[LostBoy]

Hey guys,

I've literally just finished this song a couple of days ago.Weirdly for me I wrote it quite quickly and out of the blue while I was waiting for some lyrical inspiration on a different song.I do find it odd/weird how these songs seem to spring on us at the strangest times,I'm sure others can relate?

Anyway,I woke up the other night to a beautiful,but bloody bright moon that was shining directly through the smallest gap in our curtains right into my face! Anyway as beautiful and annoying as it was,it did give me the opening line "I'm so over the moon" so it wasn't all bad!     the song just kind of flowed from that.

I have concerns over whether the chorus lyrics work or not? I would like to think that the images are clear enough,but I'm not sure if I've traded emotional impact for play on words??

Melodically/vocally I challenged myself and took a left everywhere that I would normally go right...3 harmonies not two,I started the song higher than normal and of course I put on my hot pants and tried my hand at singing falsetto! Eek!

It's just me and a piano...(a robot one I'm afraid   ) it's almost like its..."bare bones" or something??
Sigh...story of my life,too late to everything!!  

All thoughts are welcome and thanks for listening.
Leo  

https://soundcloud.com/leo-b-5/sandcastle-heart

Sandcastle Heart

I'm so over the moon
Her tides came crashing back too soon
Now my baby she's gone
Swept away on some wave of emotion

I didn't stand a chance
Cos he flys a plane
Has a house in the south of Spain
And loves to dance

Damn,life's a beach
Dashing my dreams on the rocks
And I'm falling apart
As they dance on my sandcastle heart.

I'm so over the moon
Cold and bright,a spotlight on the truth
Nothing matters,she's gone
I'm just a desert island
That she stayed on

I never read the signs
Cos he was a friend
I was played like a fool to the end
My love was blind.

[hardtwistmusic]

"Sandcastle Heart" is such a fascinating concept and title that it needs to occur more than once in this song. 

It's sheer genius, but it's under-used here.

[LostBoy]

Hey Hardtwist,hmm..I can see how you would think that reading the lyrics (my laziness).In the song I use it 5 times.Its my fault for not writing all the choruses out.Thanks for the feedback on the title.If u give it a listen,hopefully it will come across better used.

Thanks mate.

[Jamie]

Hi Leo, great vocals, melody, and harmonies. Yes, sometimes inspiration leaps at you unexpectedly, and no I don't understand it either!
Good song!
Cheers
Jamie

[CaliaMoko]

Oh, wow! Not much for nits. Sometimes the ends of the words didn't come through. That's about it.

My kind of song is typically up tempo, upbeat, positive message, happy, etc...but this song--although the antithesis of all that--is my kind of song. The chord progression with the accompanying melody...and those vocals...together they do it for me.

Vicki

[tina m]

this was fabulously sung leo ...unusual harmonies & lots of them... for me they made it a little bit vocally OTT ... but they do make it sound very modern & Im sure simon cowell would definitely have you as far as his judges house
the lyrics are corny but clever & that makes them pefect modern pop lyrics...amanda holden would struggle with them...but not evryone is as intelligent as me
I normally love your stuff & though I think this is very good its not totally my thing

[hardtwistmusic]

Hey Hardtwist,hmm..I can see how you would think that reading the lyrics (my laziness).In the song I use it 5 times.Its my fault for not writing all the choruses out.Thanks for the feedback on the title.If u give it a listen,hopefully it will come across better used.

Thanks mate.

Ah.... I had been reviewing lyrics, and thought I was still in the lyrics section.  Didn't notice the link, and thus didn't catch on that the "Sandcastle Heart" line actually was used so often. 

Now that I'm up to speed, very nice song. 

[pompeyjazz]

Lovely melodic song Leo. Great inspiration. I love the title and the images that are portrayed in the Lyrics. Voice sounding great as usual. How DO you get those high notes ?

Great stuff

John

[Skub]

A masterful vocal performance,Leo. You are some chanter,kiddo. 

I loved the whole song,the only thing for me was the level of the piano distracted me a little from your great vox.

Marvelous.

[Buc McMaster]

Nice!  Excellent vocal, imaginative melody, an easily understood lyric.  This I like!  Good work, sir!

[Movin Flavour]

Leo,

Another great ballad.

Yet again your vocals are amazing, this time matched by some beautiful piano playing.

Emotive lyrics....seem very personal.

Sandeep

[MartynRich]

Fantastic stuff Leo and very dfferent from the normal rubbish you subject us to 

The chords and melody are very inventive, not your standard stuff and beautifully sung as usual. The harmonies are also spot on as usual, but it would be good to try something counter-rhymic sometimes - it may add more variety towards the end. But overall I love it, I think it sounds very original for a ballad - the best inspiration always comes quickly. Fab song.

[LostBoy]

Haha!! Tina! I wrote this song so that you could have a chance to nip to the loo at the gig!!

Thanks so much to everyone for your really encouraging feedback on this song,i really appreciate it.I know I could have done much better with the music on this one and someone has kindly offered to produce it for me as I'm kind of juggling projects at the moment,so that's cool and will be fun to hear how someone else hears the song musically.

Thanks again guys! 

[AlzieBear]

Excellent song title here mate - that alone made me want to listen to it. Voice is very powerful and clear too. Song could do with a nice hook really.

[rightly]

Very good. Melody surprised me in a good way.
Good falsetto and well placed. Seems effortless and intricate.
Really lovely. Thanks.