Hi Kevin,
Great lyrics, I say this after having listened to the track and not really heard them and then reading them. This is a fault of mine, not yours. I tend not to notice lyrics too much and just focus on melody, harmony, rhythm etc. Perhaps why I have so much trouble writing my own lyrics.
I've only listened to this once and I liked what I heard. Some great harmonic and melodic ideas in there and I loved when the guitars kicked in to beef things up towards the end.
I did feel when I was listening that it needed something else, maybe an extra gear, that it was leading me somewhere, building to something that just didn't quite arrive in a way that satisfied me completely. Now although this is how i felt on first listen, I think I maybe wrong about this. Having now read the lyrics properly this maybe the added dynamic that I was missing first time. I also think it is one of those songs that for me is likely to take a while to settle on me and for me to fully appreciate.
I've felt this way about a lot of songs in the past that I've then gone on to really love, I think sometimes I just have strong ideas about where I would go or what I would do and when the song doesn't follow in that vein I have to readjust my perception and listen again.
Great production as usual.
Yodasdad