Bumpy Track demo

[neil connor]

Hi everyone in songwriterforum land

I've a bit of time on my hands following an operation so i'll try and contribute :-)

Here's a new 'protest'song that I thought i'd share. From personal expeireince.

neilconnor-2 · bumpy-track-demo-master-12-feb

Cheers

Neil

[Rightly]

I remember your voice.
This reminds me of Pink Floyd somehow.
Funky, but English. I think that's a good thing. Cool voice.
It's a good demo. I've no idea how you'd improve on it.
A tight little numba. Great.

[IronKnee]

Hey there Neil...I like this a lot.
You take a hum-drum event and turn it into an introspective song!
Love it!
And i agree with R.... very cool vocals!

[Vicki]

Sounds good to me. You always do good work, so I'm not surprised! My hearing issues prevent me from hearing enough of the lyrics to comment on them. I can hear your voice fine, maybe a little lost in the mix. I did understand most of the spoken section when the instrumentation was lighter. In general I like the vibe!

[Thekesslerboy]

I like this and can hear it going on to be a lot bigger.  Shades of Another Brick in the Wall with that funky minor chord, obviously, but also Ian Dury and the Blockheads with the feel and vocals.

I think the chorus could do with a vocal change of some kind, maybe a megaphone or telephone call effect.  Or sung by a female diva.  Something to distinguish it from the verse.  But it is a very good effort and will be an even better song when opened up. I hear brass and horns in there! 

[Mora Amaro La Loba]

A very catchy protest, really!!!

[mayaclars]

@neil connor ,
Good sounding rock with a late 70's vibe.
Cool guitars and good vocal performance.

Maya