Hi Rightly, I like to write stories myself and can see that you got a classic set up for this drama, two characters with very different views on human existence on this planet. Your song tackles it head on as that’s your nature and the honesty of your approach definitely punches through.
I really enjoyed the imagination in the musical arrangement and the overall power of the composition. You’ve definitely not lost your touch since I was last here! 😉
Hi MichaelA
Yes, the short story
I'm not saying it's earth-shattering
Just a funny sketch
A skeleton of a story,
ooh to have the skills of writing ✍️
It's more than different viewpoints
1 character is ready to respectfully discuss, a strangers viewpoint
The other character, patronising and
dismissive of any other viewpoint than her own.
And yet all eyes n ears are on the 1st character,
who's making an effort not to offend,
the offender can be as
spectacularly outrageous as she pleases, with impunity,
exempt, from even the most casual judgement. Aaaaah.
Hey, thanks for your feedback
The song kind of works acoustically too
I'm just not sure if it's interesting enough
to make it worth investing the time
of getting an acoustic performance right.
2nd day not smoking
Going mental!