artificial love

[sircus]

hey

been a little while
hope u enjoy!

Verse 1

Woke up full of dread
Loves spinning right round my head
I don't know how I'm supposed to feel
No one told me the rules of this deal

Pre Chorus

Am I ready for more?
To sell myself and soar?
Will I make it to the end?
I don't think I'm built to bend

Chorus

It's not fair, I'm not true
Where does love start and end with you?
Falling from heights unknown
Where do I fall on the spectrum of-?

Verse 2

Living like a needle stick
Full up but too dumb to quit
It's tearing me apart, right from my heart
I don't know if I'm capable of more

Pre Chorus

Am I ready to become?
To learn the ways of love?
Do you tell the truth?
I don't think that I do

Chorus

It's not fair, I'm not real
You said you loved me bout a hundred times right here
Pierced by cupids cursed arrow
Where do I fall if I don't trust-?

Bridge

Burned the bridges we walked over
Told you I was just hungover
Felt the fears I thought I wouldn't
Lied to keep the thoughts just prudent
Broke my heart without your help
I told you I loved you as well
It's hard to feel the happiness
When you need me to feel my best
And I could crash and burn so hard
And I could fuck this up, oh lord
There wouldn't be a reason though
So I'll just go on with the show
A wish is all it ends up being
A functioning unloved machine
And what it is is what it was
There's no way to feel like I'm loved

Chorus

It's not fair, I'm empty
You're the best thing to ever happen to me
I don't care, I'm just stuck
Thinking about all this artificial love

[Vicki]

I'm pressed for time at the moment, so just a couple of comments.

1. Interesting choices...instead of consistent choruses, you have different words every time. Unusual but not bad. I recommend having a solid reason for doing that.

2. I really like some of your "near" rhymes--good prosody for an unstable theme like yours. Pat Pattison would be proud!

3. This one isn't actually about your song...I'd really like to see you providing some feedback for some of the other members. I think you'd find you'd get more responses if you did some listening and commenting on the songs of others.

Keep writing!!