Lady Killer

[SineGuy]

[Verse 1]
He drifted in from the silver streets
Wore his best midnight smile
Lookin' for an easy mark
Schooled in shooting down hearts
His gaze landed on my jaded eyes

[Verse 2]
I exposed his disguise
Saw through every rehearsed line
Cuffed his killer streak
I'm a valentine, not a victim
So I pulled him in then whispered
Good try
And walked out into the neon night


I wanted "noir vibes" and wondered if I pulled it off.
Here's how I roughly wanted it to sound like:
https://suno.com/s/KhWWkfAzaqWfIoOp