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Rockin' Chair

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Cameron F

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« on: March 09, 2014, 10:44:10 AM »
This is one of the first tunes I wrote with some feeling in, I posted it on here last month and got some feedback and tweaked it a bit, added two more verses and a pre-chorus and want to know what you guys think. Feedback always appreciated. Cheers.

Verse 1
Maybe I just don’t care,
‘cos everything you say,
it’s so hard to bare
Verse 2
Sometimes,
I just want to throw my hands in the air,
When times are hard,
I’ll be in my rocking chair.
Pre Chorus
And when I am rocking,
It’s easy for me to see,
Just who I am,
And Who I wanna be
Chorus
If you wanna find me,
Then you know where I’ll be,                
I’ll be in my rocking chair,
Why don’t you come and join me?

Verse 3
‘Cos maybe, you just need a little time,
To rock away,
Is that such a crime?

Verse 4
And when you’re rocking,
It’ll be easy for you to see,
Just who you are,
And who you wanna be
« Last Edit: March 09, 2014, 02:02:15 PM by CFCity »

Cameron F

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« Reply #1 on: March 10, 2014, 05:00:20 PM »
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« Reply #2 on: March 10, 2014, 05:21:13 PM »
First of all i got some kind of Oasis live forever vibe from it..?
 i've  separated it for easier viewing,,,to be honest the story is not well thought out,vs 4 is the same as the pre chorus except you`ve changed the person....what is the significance of a rocking chair here? is it a metaphor for something else? basically its  .......i don`t care.i`m going to sit in my rocking chair, if you sit with me ,then you will know how i feel!

I can see how in an Oasis style melody with lots of guitar going on,,the overall story won`t matter so much(as in some of their songs)...but you need to examine some of the structure as well...3 and 4 line verses...the pre chorus is not setting up that chorus, if anything it`s a better chorus! do you see what i`m saying!



Verse 1
Maybe I just don’t care,
‘cos everything you say,
it’s so hard to bare

Verse 2
Sometimes,
I just want to throw my hands in the air,
When times are hard,
I’ll be in my rocking chair.

Pre Chorus
And when I am rocking,
It’s easy for me to see,
Just who I am,
And Who I wanna be

Chorus
If you wanna find me,
Then you know where I’ll be,               
I’ll be in my rocking chair,
Why don’t you come and join me?

Verse 3
‘Cos maybe, you just need a little time,
To rock away,
Is that such a crime?

Verse 4
And when you’re rocking,
It’ll be easy for you to see,
Just who you are,
And who you wanna be