[shortwhat]

So this is a song about how being in love hurts like loads, and yeah, see what you think any feedback is welcomed.

I Fell in Love and I Almost Survived.

All signs say I’m falling apart, but I feel quite intact
I feel like I have a disease, but the only symptom is heartache
Maybe one day soon, you’ll see the real fool I am

And we could be happier than this, you realise I’m such a mess
I don’t wanna be the brave one, but maybe I’ll have to
Maybe I’m ready to tell you

I begged that it wouldn’t hurt, nobody listened
So I must be irresistible, winced up in my head
My voice falls through, what else is new with me

And we could be happier than this, you realise I’m such a mess
I don’t wanna be the brave one, but maybe I’ll have to
Maybe I’m ready to tell you

How did this happen to me?
And fuck, I love it in a different way
But it hurts so much, yeah it hurts

And we could be happier than this, you realise I’m such a mess
I don’t wanna be the brave one, but maybe I’ll have to
Maybe I’m ready to tell you

[jonpromos]

Again, excellent for a guy at fourteen. Ahh... First love/crush? You know what they say about the first cut. Crushes are easy. Love is a whole other thing. If you think crushes are hard, wait till you get the other bug. The writing types like us experience it worse than other people. We hurt more and write more because of it.

Your words flow well. BUT they could flow better. Keep writing.