All One Enchantress Knows (demo)

[icystorm]

Among my many demos, this is one I plan to revisit, revise, and upgrade this quarter. I want to:

-- add backing vocals in the chrous
-- completely revise the drum track and make it more dynamic
-- do something to differentiate the transition from the verses to the chorus
-- add ad-libs in the outro (something like "I will be hers... through all of my life...")

I once thought the mild explosive effect at the beginning of the chorus would suffice for the verse-to-chorus transition, but it clearly doesn't. Adding backing vocals in the chorus will help some, but I need to do something more assertive at that junction without changing the chords or melody. I'm slowly interviewing engineers and producers on Fiverr to hire to help me produce a better demo.

Regarding the video, it is temporary too. I will ultimately have a single actress playing the role of the enchantress Hedra in all of my videos.

All One Enchantress Knows
Words and Music: Joseph Spain
Produced by: Joseph Spain
© 2025 Joseph Spain

--Verse 1
She's made of myth and legend
And her senses are sharp
as the edge of the hunter's knife
She lies in wait in the minds
of her prey she stalks tonight

--Pre-chorus 1
There's no escape from her spell
She walks in beauty in the night
She hunts her enemies to make them know
What they don't wanna know
And they'll never hear her footsteps
fall inside their lives

--Chorus
Their secrets left unguarded
are known to her enchanting eyes
She'll hurt them in their dreams
when night time falls
and there's no place to hide
She'll reach them where they're sleepin'
She'll corner them when there's no light
Her power settles scores
Her wrath will show
All one enchantress knows

--Release
She'll take their breath and more
with her darkest curse on Earth

--Verse 2
She's made of dark and night
And her heart is as cold
as a tomb in a frozen sea
She reads their thoughts from the dark
in the minds of her enemies

--Pre-chorus 2
There's no reprieve from her hell
She walks in beauty in the night
She'll find them where they sleep
and then they'll know
what they're afraid to know
And they'll never hear her footsteps
come for them tonight

--Bridge
She incants her hex and spells
Ignites their lives with fire in their minds
Burns them alive
And she inflicts their worst nightmare
Death by fears the sorceress designs
They're out of time

(repeat chorus through fade)

[Vicki]

The driving beat keeps this moving from beginning to end. I know you plan to make changes, but the production is already a lot better than what I currently can do. I'll be interested in hearing your changes at some point.

Vicki

[icystorm]

@Vicki -- Thank you for listening and your kind words. Both are appreciated!

Cheers,
Joseph

[Magpie138]

Hey i listend,  start to finish,  the production is pretty good dso far and the theme is interesting, but i found it a little too wordy, and towards the fade i out my attention started to wain, maybe cut some of the repeats, and bring the Music more to the front, and with more energy. I hope you find this constructive as it is not meant as a critisism, just my own observation for what it's worth.
 

[Dan]

Nice production, not a million miles from some stuff I've done. Tbh I have little to add to the comments you made in the OP - I think you've identified what's need doing, the only thing I'd add is maybe avoid a fade out for the outro. Fade outs can be cool, but this feels like you didn't know how to finish the song. Anyway, worth working a little more on.

[icystorm]

@Dan -- Thank you listening and your comments.  Yes, in the outro I plan to introduce some ad-libs to make it stand out.

Cheers,
Joseph

[icystorm]

Hey i listend,  start to finish,  the production is pretty good dso far and the theme is interesting, but i found it a little too wordy, and towards the fade i out my attention started to wain, maybe cut some of the repeats, and bring the Music more to the front, and with more energy. I hope you find this constructive as it is not meant as a critisism, just my own observation for what it's worth.
 

@Magpie138 -- Thank you for listening and your comments. Your critique is well taken. I didn't reply immediately because I wasn't sure if you were a bot or AI poster, and I steer clear of those. Anyway, I saw you post a new song today, and after listening, I'm confident you're not a fake poster. I'll head over and critique your song soon.

Cheers,
Joseph