Hi,
To me the song conveyed a lot of emotion, particularly the vocal which I liked. A couple of things I wasn't sure about. The break almost sounded like two instrumental breaks back to back. Also the lead guitar (which I really liked) has a lot of reverb on it. I guess you wanted to push it back behind the vocals but I think it stayed back during the break. It was probably a style choice but perhaps the guitar would sound more contemporary with less reverb. Overall I think you did a really good job, like it a lot.
Regards,
Jay