[PaulAds]

I was in Edinburgh in 1977...and there was an awful double murder of two young ladies who were last seen in "the worlds end" pub on The Royal Mile. The story has haunted me all my life and i've followed the quest for justice right up to the present day. I wrote this from the girls' perspective and found it quite difficult to put down on paper and the more i looked into the story the more tragic it became. I always envisioned it being sung by a female...but wondered whether that would make it too uncomfortable?

Any thoughts welcome...thanks!


The Worlds End

seen things I hoped I'd never see
been where I hoped I'd never be
and when they find what's left of me
they'll know that now I’m free

not giving up or giving in
but they'll inform my next of kin
what kind of world we're living in
and what horror lies within

i understand…I know the way
that takes you down to gosford bay
where only dreams get washed away
and this is where i’ll stay

there’s one more twist of fate for me
and now it’s much too late for me
just tell them not to wait for me
and please don’t hate for me

i’ve done all i’m ever going to do
and now i know this much is true
you can't escape that rendezvous
…just hope it isn’t you…

i understand…I know the way
that takes you down to gosford bay
where only dreams get washed away
and this is where i’ll stay

when summer comes around again
the streets are filled with clowns again
when laughter haunts this town again
remember how we were back then

and when the years have passed me by
and when there's no tears left to cry
and no-one left to wonder why
this had to be where my world ends

[tomcrocus]

Hello Paul,
               that must have been some experience you went through,
i'm aware of "The worlds end" murders through television,this is haunting
especially the last verse,
                                   tom.

[PaulAds]

thanks for reading it, Tom...i was 9 at the time...i read about the murders on a poster on the wall of a pub we were having lunch in...when we came out, i saw that "the worlds end" pub was just across the road.

whacked my innocence right out of the park...i can still see the poster now...38 years later

it possibly sounds a bit ridiculous...but i've somehow always felt like those two girls were my friends

[JonnyD]

Brilliant - simply brilliant. Will you be posting a finished version? I'd love to hear it

[PaulAds]

Thank you 

Yes...it's nearly done...I will try to get a demo vocal recorded in the next couple of weeks.

[hardtwistmusic]

Brilliantly poignant to the point of being frightening. 

Very much like one of the girls speaking from the grave. 

[PaulAds]

kind words...much appreciated

[Paulski]

Hi Paul
This is one of those rare cases where same-word rhymes totally work.
It' s always the real-life-inspired works that shine the brightest
Good job - looking 4ward to the song 
Paul

[Waterpilot]

This is very well done. You nailed the imagery in this one and brought out the feeling great.

[PaulAds]

thanks, fellas 

[seriousfun]

No crits here, this should work very well. Are you using a folk style for the song or at least an acoustic styled number? I think this type of music would be particularly apt.

Awaiting the finished work......


Allan.

[PaulAds]

Cheers, Allan

it's a 72bpm ballad...pretty sparse in arrangement. Haunting, hopefully...an odd aspiration...

With a really long intro, some tinkly percussion and no chorus  

Joking aside...I hope I can do it justice...I joined the group to help me with my songwriting...but it's a little scary because I've previously just banged out whatever sprung to mind and have never been overly concerned with what anyone thought of it. I DO care now...and it's quite a shock to the system.

I'm somewhat out of my comfort zone as I'm a crash,bang wallop guitar player at heart.

[Peppermint]

great song writing PaulAds,

Agree with Hardtwistmusic saying that it feels "Very much like one of the girls speaking from the grave"  Can't wait to hear this put to music.

Peppermint

 

[johnlondon]

I read this lyric when it was first posted. I didn`t have the confidence to offer feedback to an obviously experienced writer then.

However having revisited the lyrics I am just as impressed as the first time I viewed them.

To write in the third person takes some skill and a great deal of empathy, not easily done. But carried off very well here.

This will make an excellent song I suspect.

[Vintage54]

   Hi Paul,
      Lump in my throat, goosebumps on my skin. If i read or hear something that impresses me, i always say to myself, "Jesus" i wish i'd written that. This gets three hail mary's besides. Stunning my friend, absolutely stunning. Lost for words.

                         Wish i'd written that
                                Vintage54