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Title: Once Upon A Nation (America 2025)
Post by: idunno on Oct 23, 2025, 12:36 AM
https://app.box.com/s/v0c18y1uhbkpkdir8kah77a3xy2wnq4l

It's a 4+ minute long story bridging America's beginning and 2025 with a drop-hammer ending.

The YT to show chord changes.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w4wcnUkbsGg
Title: Re: Once Upon A Nation (America 2025)
Post by: Grit and Fury on Jan 02, 2026, 07:38 PM
Really enjoyed listening to this track. Love the folk style and the strength of your voice carrying the story forward. Can never guess who the final verse refers to!?! ;D

During the first listen, I felt that there wasn't enough distinction between verse & chorus, so perhaps tempo/melodic change would improve this or possibly a bridge may help?

Brilliant work & good clear recording.
Title: Re: Once Upon A Nation (America 2025)
Post by: Vicki on Jan 14, 2026, 12:08 AM
Very engaging and catchy ballad.