Dark comes down from the ceiling, nowhere left to hide,
Cold in the room and you better run or hide,
They ask their questions, but every answer's a lie.
Have you ever sow them dealing on night?
Blue and red lights,shotgun- no one saw the crime .
Heartbeat in the silence, just tryin' survive
That casual smile is harder to do
Thanks for the Xanax-they now what to do
I'm fallin', I'm risin',don't know how to wake up
I'm fallin', I'm risin',don't know why I am
I'm fallin', I'm risin',don't know what is left
Really like the dark, weighty feel of this. May I ask what style of song you are looking to use the lyrics with?
Only suggestions I can think of at the moment is to perhaps be less to the point in the Xanax line, which may open up another verse that can focus on the psychological/physical effects of the drug.
I take it the line, "Have you ever sow them dealing on night?" should be.. Have you ever seen them dealing at night?
Hope this helps. Great work though - keep at it.
Seems to convey a feeling of hopelessness. I'm interested in anything you have to say about it yourself and your purpose in posting. Are you looking for ideas for improvements? Does it have a personal meaning to you? Do you have a melody for it?