Hello. Forum veteran here
I wrote this lately
feedback?
ghosting
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they call it ghosting
'mainly happens online
and In emptiness
there are sometimes signs
with doors a' closing
like a movies end
there is so much broken
and so little to mend
soft shade
left behind, in your mind,
in your house, in your garden
and in those old photographs that you will find
have they moved country,
or busy at the gym?
knee-deep in trouble,
or had a lottery win?
you know they're out there
like some ocean wave
they would sooner perish
than be found warm and safe?
fun and games, nobody knows the way
we change, rearrange
see the patterns in the stars as they
as they fade
soft fade
left behind, in your mind,
in your house, in your garden
and in those old photographs, what will we find?
what will we find?
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rightly
Well that's an interesting theme. To me it appears to have a structure defining it's present day definition and feels in the first verse and second paints an alternative, or setup reasons behind it... maybe a historical application? I guess it depends on how you look at it! But, then again I wouldn't have come up with "Ghosting"
I also like the subtle chorus change "Soft shade/ Soft fade" Almost unnoticeable
I've got to point one there are some variations in the syllable count and meter between the first and second verses. I wonder if it might be a little difficult in certain parts for one person sing and play live as is; without a little re-sculpting here and there!
Nice one all round.